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Trying to hide in conspicuous places a night on the town in their false, plastic faces. Sweetly they sweep through magnificent halls, top-dollar galas and masquerade balls -- where always the wine is more bitter than sweet, each girl wishing for love in her ruby-clad feet. Perhaps scarecrows are thoughtful, and lions are brave, and the tin-men know passion, such a boisterous parade of hopeful young suitors, each waiting his chance to find a young lady and win her last dance. All tied up as prisoners with satin-silk chains they listlessly dance as the hope from them drains. A piano-man plinks only on the black keys: pentatonic winds on a pentatonic breeze, still not enough blowing to carry balloons or to start raining houses from cyclic typhoons. The evening draws on -- long beyond the moon’s rising, a faint glinting of green from the city’s disguising the envious looks in the eyes of the witches and harsh threatening gales of the wind as it switches. And no one is happy, none are finding their prize -- no one knows what they want, nor removes their disguise. So the dancing is pointless, bravado is hollow no wizardly magic can fix what will follow. Shallow connections that lead nowhere, and quickly the ballroom grows quiet, the witches grow prickly the lions go fleeing, the scarecrows are clueless, the tin-men don’t care, and that makes them the cruelest For out in the public, among all the noise some girls have gone missing -- and so have some boys and in the dark shadows, all knew what occurred but they whisper and gossip, and spread what they heard: that it must have been mutual, it must be alright they’re both grown adults, let’s not be so uptight. And thus they all hide, in conspicuous places enabling the culprits with false, plastic faces. 9/4/16

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Date: 2/22/2017 8:22:00 PM
Stunning !! Beautiful !!
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Date: 9/20/2016 1:30:00 PM
Great rhymes and storytelling, you have a true grasp of what real poetry is, and this is it!A7+++
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Date: 9/16/2016 4:46:00 PM
Excellent piece of rhyming poetry, Graham - Most impressed! My very best regards. :) john
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Date: 9/11/2016 7:18:00 PM
I'm feeling quiet and thoughtful, enjoy the silence for this doesn't often happen! A fav for me, Graham! Loving the outstanding imagery, Makes me want to stop hurling these yellow bricks, and start building with them instead. Best wishes, Mikki :)
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Date: 9/7/2016 8:43:00 PM
Marvellous piece, grahamburgler, very clever, insightful, flows so well. Much enjoyed. Regards, Viv
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Date: 9/5/2016 11:02:00 PM
Quite an excellent piece!
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Date: 9/4/2016 9:37:00 PM
Very very well written, I loved the depth and humor of it all. Somehow you made me smile, over a sad state of affairs! :)
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Date: 9/5/2016 10:57:00 AM
Thanks Arthur. I'm glad you enjoyed it. -G
Date: 9/4/2016 7:47:00 PM
Not so impressive. I think I forgot the 7, but I can't remember. Now, you may have 2 7s. Let us laugh - oh, my memory at times ... CayCay
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Date: 9/4/2016 7:44:00 PM
loved this! the rhyme and flow was amazing :)-luloo
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Date: 9/5/2016 10:56:00 AM
Thank you for taking the time to comment. I appreciate the feedback. =) -G
Date: 9/4/2016 7:31:00 PM
This impressive poem is excellent, absolutely excellent in content, rhyme, imagery, metaphors. I simply love it, even admire it. I, and everyone one I know, has spent at least one night 'on the meat scene' and your take is spot on. I could go on and on to make up for the readers who said nothing (makes no sense), but my endless appreciation of this jewel is limited by character count. With hands applauding, I bid you well and leave a 7 (yes, with no hands!) ... CayCay
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Date: 9/4/2016 7:36:00 PM
I'm glad you appreciate it, and thank you for the encouraging words, and high marks. =) Also, impressive work with the no-handed typing/rating. ;) -G

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