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In a Perfect World

In a perfect world everyone's visions would come to fruition, but of course that couldn't happen (given our nature) and thus would end up in contradiction. Perhaps it's because we ask the wrong question, thinking world means You or Me. When in actuality (when analyzed thoroughly) World means We. Written February 14th, 2016 For Contest: In a Perfect World hosted by Catie Lindsey Honorable Mention

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Probir Gupta

Date: 2/20/2016 5:39:00 AM

Exactly, and put through poetic lines in a nice brevity.

Timothy Hicks
Date: 2/24/2016 12:04:00 AM

Thanks Probir, for your visit ... always appreciated!

Reason A. Poteet

Date: 2/19/2016 7:11:00 AM

You have sparked our thoughts today. Perfect can mean complete and that involves all of us. Love that first verse, you take us on a trip that ends in disaster. Great brevity, Tim, recalling Michael Jackson's hit, We are the World.

Timothy Hicks
Date: 2/19/2016 9:48:00 PM

Very astute and well-thought response, Reason. Thank you. I haven't heard that song, but I do like his Man in the Mirror!

Steve Grammatico

Date: 2/19/2016 5:49:00 AM

An excellent sentiment well-expressed, Timothy.

Timothy Hicks
Date: 2/19/2016 9:44:00 PM

Thanks again Steve. Sentimental is a good word for it ...

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 2/19/2016 1:13:00 AM

Awesome poetry n win Timothy.. big congrats!

Timothy Hicks
Date: 2/19/2016 9:43:00 PM

Thanks Upma! :)

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 2/18/2016 10:22:00 PM

Timothy, Congrats on your "Perfect World WIN." LINDA

Timothy Hicks
Date: 2/19/2016 9:40:00 PM

Thanks Linda! I was happy to see my poem up there, especially since there was so many other really good ones, wasn't sure.

Susan Gentry

Date: 2/18/2016 6:20:00 PM

Congratulations on your win! So true... perception. Enjoyed reading this. :)

Timothy Hicks
Date: 2/18/2016 9:58:00 PM

Thanks Susan! You seem to have gotten the message :)

Lin Lane

Date: 2/18/2016 6:04:00 PM

Well done and congratulations on this one, Timothy.

Timothy Hicks
Date: 2/18/2016 9:58:00 PM

Thank you Lin!

Lu Loo

Date: 2/18/2016 5:59:00 PM

Timothy, congrats on your placement in the contest *smiles*-luloo

Timothy Hicks
Date: 2/18/2016 6:00:00 PM

Looks like I just barely made it through ... cool :) Thanks for letting me know (I forget to check) ...

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/17/2016 5:41:00 PM

awesome second verse, Timothy. Yes, this is how I feel about the silliness of a perfect world.

Timothy Hicks
Date: 2/17/2016 10:12:00 PM

Thanks Andrea! I didn't feel like writing something super long, so I tried to keep it short ... lol. Appreciate your visits, and seeing your smiling profile pic (are you at the beach in that picture?)

Paul Callus

Date: 2/16/2016 11:18:00 AM

The one who envisaged a perfect world, Sir Thomas More, was executed...and that shows how right your conclusion is in the 1st stanza! Again the correct answer is given in the 2nd stanza in which 'we' wins over egoism/individuality. A very good example of a Grook! // paul

Timothy Hicks
Date: 2/17/2016 2:00:00 AM

Thanks Paul! I'll have to look more into this Thomas More fellow, as I don't believe I've heard of him before.

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 2/16/2016 7:13:00 AM

A perfect world to be achieved by imperfect beings is an utopia! Let us construct a less imperfect world if we can, but even this, as you say, is not easy to be achieved! Well-done my friend, Timothy! Good luck!

Timothy Hicks
Date: 2/17/2016 1:59:00 AM

Thanks Demetrios. I appreciate your thoughtful comments, and gracious spirit!

Amelia Gee

Date: 2/15/2016 3:12:00 PM

Good example for contest!

Timothy Hicks
Date: 2/16/2016 2:46:00 AM

Thanks...

Emile Pinet

Date: 2/15/2016 1:29:00 PM

Your word choices elegantly define what you wish to capture and convey to the reader. Well written. Emile.

Timothy Hicks
Date: 2/16/2016 2:46:00 AM

You've gotten to the heart of the matter, my friend! I'm glad my words were received and that you got something out of it. Thank you!

Suzanne Delaney

Date: 2/15/2016 12:01:00 PM

Human nature is so perplexing but your simple solution is so full of wisdom. More than one path to perfection and 'We,' does wipe out selfishness. This will be a winner.

Timothy Hicks
Date: 2/16/2016 2:44:00 AM

You're always so kind and thoughtful, my dear poet friend. We shall see how the contest goes!

Eileen Manassian

Date: 2/15/2016 10:13:00 AM

Lovely, Timothy. :) What a great message. Hugs

Timothy Hicks
Date: 2/16/2016 2:43:00 AM

Thanks as ever Eileen!

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 2/15/2016 8:47:00 AM

I like it! Good luck in the contest.

Timothy Hicks
Date: 2/16/2016 2:43:00 AM

Thank you Richard! Though I think I enjoyed yours more, nonetheless I wanted to write something a little bit different, and keep it short.