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If I Write Down Words

If I write down words that pour from me like water rushing from a rusty gutter carrying my cries in the flood with decaying leaves and the smattering off the roof of droppings from so many ceaselessly cooing mourning doves, is that a poetry of sorts? If the aged shingled roof leaks at its eaves (like my eyes) when wind blows the rain nearly horizontal and the house beams creak and sound like corroded hinges when seldom-used doors are opened, has a trope occurred? And, is anything -- honestly -- more than almost senseless patter? Does it really even matter?

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Date: 6/28/2022 1:24:00 PM
I LOVE YOUR LINE ABOUT SENSELESS PATTER, EXCEPT FOR YOU AND A FEW OTHERS, BRILLIANT BRILLIANT LINE LEO. X
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Date: 11/1/2021 11:35:00 PM
I just read this again and highlighted this line again "is that a poetry of sorts?" to say - IT CERTAINLY IS. Then I looked down and saw that I had already highlighted this line and said the same thing three months ago. I obviously cannot say this enough, and I am redundant.
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Date: 7/26/2021 8:52:00 PM
"is that a poetry of sorts?" It certainly is! This is REAL poetry, Leo.
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Leo Larry Amadore
Date: 7/26/2021 9:40:00 PM
Thank you so much Caren! I receive few comments but those I do get are usually, like this one, encouraging and I am quite thankful for them!

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