I Need You

Black grief, I need you, fill my mouth with laughter, my tongue with shouts of joy

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Skat A

Date: 7/4/2015 11:32:00 PM

David, CONGRATULATIONS, on having your poem featured on the soup's home page. Enjoy the coming week. Take Care ~SKAT~

Cynthia Jones

Date: 1/11/2015 2:58:00 PM

David, this is an excellent Haiku. Well done. :O) Keep up with the great work. Keep on penning. Thank you so very much for sharing your talents with us. We all truly appreciate it. *S* Cynthia

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 11/27/2014 7:53:00 PM

Hope your tongue is filled with crystals of sugar ..and your mouth with cheerful songs. the wrinkle of yyouur smile/lifts the curving of your lips/Cheerful joy : )

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/29/2014 12:12:00 AM

Ok, I am back where I left off with your poetry! WElcome to Soup! I enjoy reading short poems! I would never have seen that comment you replied to me if I had not come back here by mistake. A lot of poets do not see the replies, just to let you know. We have our notifications turned off. Anyway, just something I tell new poets! Have a good day!

Phyllis Babcock

Date: 10/22/2014 11:58:00 AM

Nicely done on this poem and I like your explanation to my friend Andrea. love phyl

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/21/2014 7:02:00 PM

I like your message, but I don't understand why you need black grief. Love the line: fill my mouth with laughter!!

David Meade
Date: 10/21/2014 7:40:00 PM

Thank-you for your comment and question. The "black grief" is the state of the person who is calling out to his love -- for new hope, a new beginning -- to get past the grief, the darkness of these emotions -- to laughter, joy . . . completeness. Grief is not a prerequisite -- the poem describes the journey. All the best.

Pandita Sietesantos

Date: 10/21/2014 12:18:00 PM

Excellent haiku with a clever twist! Pandita

David Meade
Date: 10/21/2014 3:46:00 PM

Thank-you!