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His Eternal Revenue

Years as paint strokes on canvas you, and framed into a new star when through. ----------------------------------------------- Contest: Any Theme Crystalline Sponsor: Rick Parise Written: 11.12.16

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Doug Vinson

Date: 3/9/2017 9:28:00 AM

Quite a pleasurable two lines to read, Rob. : ) Very well done!

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 1/31/2017 9:11:00 AM

Wow, you are so good at these restrictive styles. Great lessons for me on how less is more. Just excellent rob. Thank you.

Rob Carmack
Date: 2/4/2017 12:15:00 AM

Thank you Armand and God Bless you.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 12/22/2016 12:31:00 PM

ohh, this is a moving read, rob.. so glad to see you around.. how our doggie?.. season's best!..huggs

Rob Carmack
Date: 12/22/2016 6:21:00 PM

Boo is doing great, enjoying all the holiday foods. My best and a few dozen hugs to you & Snickers.

Jan Allison

Date: 12/14/2016 7:28:00 AM

A beautiful crystalline Rob - so lovely to see your avatar on soup ... miss you:-( hugs jan xx

Rob Carmack
Date: 12/22/2016 6:22:00 PM

Hey Jan - wrapping you like a wreath with a big hug. Thanks for for reading & commenting.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/30/2016 3:28:00 PM

what an awesome message in this one, my friend. Glad that you put up a new one and sorry I missed it earlier.

Rob Carmack
Date: 12/1/2016 4:39:00 AM

Thanks Andrea.

Becca Teagan

Date: 11/30/2016 2:46:00 PM

hmm... this is interesting! I'll have to look at what Crystalline is ...

Rob Carmack
Date: 12/1/2016 4:39:00 AM

I think it does have 17 syllables, 1st line = 8 and the 2nd line = 9 right?

Becca Teagan
Date: 11/30/2016 4:06:00 PM

regardless, it's a cool poem.

Becca Teagan
Date: 11/30/2016 2:50:00 PM

I looked... isn't it supposed to have 17 syllables?

Arthur Vaso

Date: 11/13/2016 12:20:00 AM

Liked this, very contemplative for me!

Rob Carmack
Date: 11/14/2016 1:54:00 AM

Thank you Arthur.