Hiku Mix

the distinctive sound of whittling leaves - midnight garden - - - - - - - - spreading from day into night - her flaming hair - - - - - - - - exposing my vulnerability - lightning - - - - - - - - despite the routine she cannot help blushing - evening sky - - - - - - - - A Hiku Poetry Contest Sponsor: William Kekaula Placed 2nd Posted 26th November 2021

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Richard Lamoureux

Date: 8/3/2022 5:22:00 AM

A big congratulations on your win. Well deserved Paul. ;0)

Paul Callus
Date: 8/7/2022 1:24:00 PM

Thank you, Richard. Best regards // paul

Valsa George

Date: 8/1/2022 11:46:00 PM

Wonderful Hiku Mix.... ! As our poet friend Malabika shared it on facebook, I could read it ! A strong thread connects the day, evening and mid night. Thanks Paul for sharing this rare beauty

Paul Callus
Date: 8/2/2022 6:25:00 AM

Thank you, Valsa. I had not realized Mala hads shared this on FB! I've only just come online. ~ Best regards // paul

Delice Arleen Skelly

Date: 1/27/2022 4:00:00 AM

Nicely done Paul...Delice

Paul Callus
Date: 5/7/2022 2:10:00 AM

Thank you so much, Delice I had not realized you had commented, so pls excuse the late reply. May you have an enjoyable weekend. // paul

Brian Sambourne

Date: 1/9/2022 7:59:00 AM

Superb Haiku's Paul. You beautifully convey the gentle allure of a long haired woman whose appeal meshes with night. Congratulations! Brian

Jack Horne

Date: 12/8/2021 7:03:00 AM

glad to see these were winners - love them!

Paul Callus
Date: 12/12/2021 6:56:00 AM

Thank you Jack. All the best for the Christmas season. // paul

Paulette Calasibetta

Date: 12/2/2021 11:55:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. A beautiful and moving Haiku....well done! Blessings, Paulette

Paul Callus
Date: 12/3/2021 12:32:00 PM

Thank you, Paulette...glad you found my Hiku to your liking. Regards & Blessings // paul

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 12/2/2021 10:39:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. A "Wonderful" Haiku write. I really enjoyed it. Have a great/blessed day writing away....................

Paul Callus
Date: 12/3/2021 12:31:00 PM

Thank you for reading and commenting, Paula. So pleased that you enjoyed. ~ Wishing you a lovely weekend. // paul

Eve Roper

Date: 12/2/2021 9:15:00 AM

Great haikus , Paul. “She cannot help blushing evening sky” just stunning imagery. Congratulations on your win. Hugs Eve

Paul Callus
Date: 12/3/2021 12:20:00 PM

Thank you so much, Eve. Your lovely feedback is truly appreciated. Hugs // paul

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 12/2/2021 3:59:00 AM

Love the imagery! Congratulations, Paul!

Paul Callus
Date: 12/2/2021 6:08:00 AM

Thank you on both counts, Kim. ~ Best regards // paul

Beata Agustin

Date: 12/1/2021 7:35:00 PM

Wow! Congrats! Thanks for sharing... God bless you.

Paul Callus
Date: 12/2/2021 6:07:00 AM

Thank you, Beata. Glad you enjoyed. Regards & Blessings // paul

Harry Horsman

Date: 12/1/2021 4:31:00 PM

Hi Paul, great hiku, truly amazing poetry.

Paul Callus
Date: 12/2/2021 5:56:00 AM

You are too kind, Harry...thank you my friend! ~ Best regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/1/2021 3:31:00 PM

wow, Paul. These are simply MAHVELOUS!!!!Big congrats. very well deserved win

Paul Callus
Date: 12/2/2021 5:55:00 AM

Wow Andrea...these lovely comments from a veteran Souper like you are much appreciated! Thank you. ~ Warm regards // paul

Constance La France

Date: 12/1/2021 2:27:00 PM

Paul, beautifully penned and congratulations on your win in William's Hiku contest ~ peace and tranquility _Constance

Paul Callus
Date: 12/2/2021 5:53:00 AM

Thank you Constance. I enjoyed your winning entry, too. Best regards and have a nice day. // paul

Susan Ashley

Date: 12/1/2021 2:15:00 PM

Dear Paul, I’m so pleased to return with my heartiest congratulations for your excellent win in William’s contest. Your alluring imagery thrills my heart’s imagination and it’s a joy to share the podium with you. Warmest wishes and hugs, my wonderful friend.. ~Susan

Paul Callus
Date: 12/2/2021 5:51:00 AM

Thank you dear Susan. It's not that often that we meet on the podium as nowadays I rarely take part in contests, or else fail to cross the finishing line!! ~ Warm regards and hugs my friend // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 12/1/2021 12:26:00 PM

What an awesome string of haiku I especially like the imagery in the second and forth poems, many congratulations on your win Paul, hugs jan xx

Paul Callus
Date: 12/2/2021 5:48:00 AM

Thank you Jan. As you well know I love these short poetry forms! Sending my regards to all at home. Hugs // paul

Hilo Poet

Date: 12/1/2021 10:49:00 AM

Penetrative verses, Paul. A cleverly effortless thread that's overpowering my friend! My compliments on your placement in the Hiku contest, Aloha!

Paul Callus
Date: 12/2/2021 5:46:00 AM

I welcome the complimentary remarks and the high placement, William. Thank you and regards my friend // paul

Harry Horsman

Date: 11/28/2021 10:19:00 PM

Will be hard to beat in the contest, Paul, Great poetry.

Paul Callus
Date: 12/2/2021 5:43:00 AM

Thank you for having faith in my entry, Harry. Yours went a step further and placed first!! Best regards // paul

Delice Arleen Skelly

Date: 11/28/2021 3:23:00 AM

Very nice entry into the contest Paul. I am a great fan of haiku and enjoyed your images...Delice

Paul Callus
Date: 12/2/2021 5:41:00 AM

Many thanks, Delice. I have read and enjoyed your winning Hiku contest entry...well done. Regards // paul

Vijay Pandit

Date: 11/27/2021 5:45:00 AM

Great images, Paul.

Paul Callus
Date: 12/2/2021 5:40:00 AM

Thank you for reading and liking, Vijay. All the best // paul

Susan Ashley

Date: 11/26/2021 10:28:00 PM

Dear Paul, there’s no denying the beauty that spills from your gifted pen. I adore every Hiku in this lustrous strand of poetic pearls. Best wishes for a win and warmest wishes and hugs for you, my inspiring friend.. ~Susan

Paul Callus
Date: 12/2/2021 5:33:00 AM

Thank you for your striking and encouraging feedback, Susan. Excuse the late reply; as usual I'm playing catching up:) Warm wishes and hugs dear friend. // paul