Haiku 81

Haiku 81 yielding to the blade... arc traced on his left forearm surgeon’s staples

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Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 9/6/2013 4:39:00 PM

... Painful .... well done! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Jack Jordan
Date: 9/6/2013 4:52:00 PM

Thanks, Anne-Lise. Have a great weekend... Jack

Yvette Lisa Ndlovu

Date: 9/6/2013 8:39:00 AM

OUCH!! very vivid...enjoyed reading this Haiku!- Y.L Ndlovu

Jack Jordan
Date: 9/6/2013 12:13:00 PM

Thanks, Yvette. OUCH indeed... Jack

Poet Tacito

Date: 9/3/2013 5:19:00 PM

Damn, painful images here. This was a terrific Haiku. Excellent work!

Jack Jordan
Date: 9/3/2013 5:36:00 PM

Thanks, Drake. It was a painful thing to see, but good in that I know the guy survived... Jack

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 9/3/2013 4:04:00 PM

Jack, now this has an imagery, I won't call beautiful..LOL :-) I had staples once,, and the scar they leave is not pretty.. I hope he survived the arc trace... enjoyed the haiku...Linda

Jack Jordan
Date: 9/3/2013 5:35:00 PM

He did survive, and is doing well, I think. I see him around town occasionally. I've had staples a couple of times, also the old fashioned stitches. Stitches are far worse, and leave a very weird scar - rows of white dots. I'll take staples any time. Of course, I'd rather avoid the entire business... Jack

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 9/3/2013 3:16:00 PM

Ouch..I can feel this..so profound Jack

Jack Jordan
Date: 9/3/2013 5:32:00 PM

Thank you, Charmaine, for the very nice comment... Jack