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Gun Bubble Drunk

Memory’s echo, delicate ash Throat pinned frozen held sacred in shadow Into winter’s mouth, silence descend Beautiful annihilation, bound in light I Wander in the theater of the rising sun Gun bubble drunk (knowing that) Darkest is the heart before the distant storm Darkest is the storm under the distant heart Storm heart Heart storm Violence conceive Violence reborn World fire voice inflect life desire breath neglect

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Date: 2/8/2024 9:26:00 PM
Your title here, Mat, is a creative pull in, a word combination that resonates with today's news when we read stories of youth using guns to settle scores. A compelling read follows a thought provoking title. Be well. Brian
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Mat Ignacio
Date: 2/9/2024 5:50:00 PM
I am grateful for your response, kindest regards
Date: 1/21/2024 9:07:00 PM
This is how I feal today,a sharp intake of breath held in preperation to roar my long tamped discontent.
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Tom Woody
Date: 1/22/2024 5:50:00 PM
I feal the same way. Not sure why
Date: 1/21/2024 4:49:00 PM
You seem to have that trouble breathing because that and your life's desire do not match. A beautiful, if dark piece... powerful diction
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Mat Ignacio
Date: 1/21/2024 8:13:00 PM
my gratitude as always for your thoughts - i appreciate you
Date: 1/20/2024 6:32:00 AM
Now there's a phrase I've never heard before. Did you create it?
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Tom Woody
Date: 1/22/2024 5:50:00 PM
Kewl
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Mat Ignacio
Date: 1/21/2024 8:10:00 PM
i did (i bet it is out there though) - originally was thinking bubble gun drunk, just playing with unique phrasings and internal rhyme patterns - rearranged because i thought gun bubble flowed better - for me, i like sound combinations as much as creating unique phrasings - wrote this on a feeling but not sure where i was going with it - thank you for reading
Date: 1/20/2024 4:29:00 AM
Another creative and thought provoking poem.. nicely done..
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Mat Ignacio
Date: 1/21/2024 8:12:00 PM
my gratitude to you
Date: 1/20/2024 12:23:00 AM
What a creative and deeply intriguing write this is mat, i especially loved these two lines the most “ Darkest is the heart before the distant storm Darkest is the storm under the distant heart” well phrased and said and so true and hits strong! Pleasure always reading your work.
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Mat Ignacio
Date: 2/8/2024 8:43:00 PM
i appreciate you taking the time - deepest thanks
Date: 1/20/2024 12:00:00 AM
I wander in the theater of the rising sun - cracking line Mat, well put
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Mat Ignacio
Date: 1/21/2024 8:11:00 PM
thanks for the visit, clive, all the best to you