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Grandfather Clock - Variation On a Triolet

Grandfather Clock (A Variation on a Triolet) When I was young, not four foot tall, My Grandpa’s clock I remember well Stood and chimed, alone in the hall, When I was young, not four foot tall. Taller than I, standing by the wall. Older than he? I could not tell. My Grandpa’s clock - I remember well! When I was young, not four foot tall. My Grandma polishing the fine grained wood, I remember the hands, time’s steady measure. Day and night the clock in the hall-way stood, My Grandma polishing the fine grained wood. Pacing the hours across my passing childhood The pendulum swung in timeless leisure. I remember the hands - time’s steady measure, My Grandma polishing the fine grained wood. ABaAabBA 06/13/2021

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Date: 6/14/2021 10:20:00 AM
Liked your variation, it seems better than original. Tempted to write one with variation.
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Barry Stebbings
Date: 6/14/2021 12:43:00 PM
Thank you very much, Rama. // Barry
Date: 6/13/2021 11:54:00 AM
I like the changes you made in the triolet form, you may convince me to actually enjoy writing it lol, have written a few but they are far from my favurite:-) hugs jan xx
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Barry Stebbings
Date: 6/14/2021 5:39:00 AM
Thank you, Jan. I will use this variation again, I like the way it removes the strict repetition. // Barry
Date: 6/13/2021 8:20:00 AM
Barry, as one who has "tinkered" with triolet, I really enjoyed your variation. Well-written and perfectly rhymed. I think sometimes a slight alteration makes for the better poem. I hope you'll enter my "Write Me a Trionet" contest.
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Barry Stebbings
Date: 6/14/2021 5:36:00 AM
Thank you very much, I will have a look at your contest.

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