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First Sin

First of all, Eve took a bite. Then Adam tried the delight. The serpents plot. Adam knew it was not right, before he took that long plight. The serpents shot. Bible says God came that night, they were hidden out of sight. Repenting not. God called and they answered, "What? We are naked on this lot." "Who told you that?" "When we ate the fruit we got our eyes opened on the spot." So there they sat. Beside a fire so hot with food cooking in a pot. Gone diplomat. "Leave this garden habitat there is no more welcome mat." They had to leave. Punishment would be no pat. Adam toiled without a spat. How they did grieve. In the evenings they would chat about their past garden flat. Now they believe! For David Williams Virelai contest

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Date: 8/10/2012 6:16:00 AM
Congratulations on your placement in David's "Virelai" contest Marty. Love, Carol
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Date: 8/7/2012 11:42:00 AM
An excellent poem in this tough form Marty!Congrats on your win!
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Date: 8/7/2012 10:39:00 AM
I love what you did with this form, retelling the story if Adam and Eve, Marty. Congrats on your win! Love and Blessings, Rhonda
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Date: 8/7/2012 9:50:00 AM
Never was the first sin story told so succinctly and well. Congratulations. Love, Joyce
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Date: 8/7/2012 9:38:00 AM
Congratulations on your poem winning. A great verse with a perfect lesson.
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Date: 8/7/2012 9:25:00 AM
greeat, delightful stuff, marty.. congrats on your fine win!...:) huggs!
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Date: 8/7/2012 8:06:00 AM
congrats on your win Marty...nicely done
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Date: 8/7/2012 5:49:00 AM
congratulations on this super win Marty xx
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Date: 8/7/2012 4:21:00 AM
Marty, congrats on your win, you took a really nice twist on an old story, well done..David
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Date: 7/14/2012 12:41:00 AM
people always believe to late dont they
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Date: 7/12/2012 10:01:00 AM
lovely poem Marty enjoyed...Patrick
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Date: 7/12/2012 9:51:00 AM
something different .a brave effort .thank you for sharing .jk
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