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Eve's Last Journal Entry

How the wind whispers to the weeping willows. Nearby the lark sings her song of sweetness And the walnuts and apricots drop onto The leafy ground. The man sits with his muscles Glistening in the sea’s mists. He stares upward Toward where the emerald seas meet the blue skies. Today I touched and tasted the bark Of the cinnamon tree. The lioness reached out To pat at me as I passed by, then rolled over For a belly rub. I nearly stepped on That little green snake curled up Under the apple tree, the bounty Of the mother earth. The man misses So much. I think he needs his freedom. I see it in his eyes. I like the sound Of the word, full and round, freedom. Silly little snake basking in the sun Under that tree. Those bright red Apples. Tonight with the cinnamon I found, maybe I’ll make the man An apple pie.....

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010




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Date: 10/31/2010 11:21:00 PM
I love the imagery that you depicted. Thank you for commenting on my poem. HJ
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Date: 6/5/2010 9:03:00 PM
Hi again. I forgot to rate. There we go with a 7. Love, Joyce
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Date: 6/5/2010 9:01:00 PM
Oh I am glad I found you and this lovely gem. I am with Andrea. I would have expected to have found this as a winner. So apple pie goes way back to Eve. She probably had a solar oven of sorts. I am sure she came with instincts much stronger than ours. Thank you for your lovely words on my apple pie offering. Love,Joyce
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Date: 6/5/2010 8:39:00 PM
oh, I just figured it out. YOu never wrote it to a particular Adam. That is what happened!
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Date: 6/5/2010 8:38:00 PM
gosh, I just dont' get it. Already I have seen two poems of yours which did not appear on winner's lists. I am sure i read all the winners for Eve and for Adam. How could this one not make it?? It's awesome. Another 7 for ya!!
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Date: 6/5/2010 11:30:00 AM
Nice pace in this journal...just as if she WERE writing it down. But you know, we're not supposed to be reading other peoples' diary entries...lol Good write. Dan C ps. Thanks for your comments on my work.
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Date: 6/4/2010 12:09:00 AM
This sure is very interesting--I love the idea that even Eve had a journal :) nice one, at least they got to east some good apple pie ;)--& thanks for your comments....nikko :)
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Date: 5/30/2010 6:06:00 PM
This has the wit and the twist of the best Twilight zone episodes. Good job! You are very kind. With this, you should be very proud! Gerard.
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Date: 5/26/2010 10:34:00 AM
Hi Linda. Great use of alliteration throughout. I really enjoyed the first line. It flows very well and draws you in. Good luck in the contest. I know you'll do well. And thank you for your lovely comments. -Mike
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Date: 5/25/2010 8:02:00 PM
I think this is wonderful, I was captured from the first word, best of luck in the contest..
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Date: 5/25/2010 7:52:00 AM
"I see it in his eyes. I like the sound Of the word, full and round, freedom" very well written
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Date: 5/25/2010 6:49:00 AM
Oh, I like the way she decides to make him apple pie, Linda! Quite a foreboding poem and it should do well in the contest. Best wishes for success, Carolyn
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Date: 5/25/2010 5:49:00 AM
yes nice poet and how did eve make an apple pie? did she have a solar oven? where did she get flour? or the concept of pie? and You can just put an * my own personal Adam....on the bottom of the verse you don't HAVE to write to a certain Adam to win......(just add the note expalin which Adam...yourown or one of them to the bottom of the poem)
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Date: 5/25/2010 5:09:00 AM
Thankxxx Linda.. to see any of the ADAMS or their poems go to the contest page and view my contest down at the bottom ..the poets and poems are listed so u can just look them up and read and choose which one u like... then u just adjust your Eve poem to dedicate to an ADAM of your choice or even write him a **Footnote at the bottom of your poem or create one stanza just for him.... its both creative and fun...glad u are enjoying and thankxxx for your special comments on my passion poem..luv..
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Date: 5/25/2010 3:03:00 AM
Wish you all the best in the contest. Quite a unique expressions
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Date: 5/24/2010 9:22:00 PM
Linda/Eve, you temptress you. I loved this verse. This should fare well in the contest. And, we don't miss as much as we let you believe. Joe
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Date: 5/24/2010 8:52:00 PM
GOOD LUCK IN THE CONTEST, LOVE IT. THIS IS DIFFERENT WITH THE JOURNAL WE NEVER GOT TO READ. THANK U,, SKAT
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Date: 5/24/2010 8:47:00 PM
Great entry Linda and good luck in Debbie's contest with this EVE ... I hope u will choose to dedicate it to an ADAM from my contest...that is what us as sponsors intended ...luv.. Linda-Marie... not necessary but counts for extra consideration.
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