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Even the Angels Wept

The day you died you took me with you, The way you lied shook me black and blue. The sorrow you felt, I sure felt it too, The tomorrow dreams won’t come true. All the good hello's turned into dying goodbye's, All the to’s and fro’s burned holes in my eyes. You thought you were so sly, but I always knew, You fought so hard to die and knew I needed you. Depressing mornings and nights of pure hell, Lessening of warnings and sights when you fell. Deprivation of your soul saving wonder, Trepidation of your whole wavering thunder. Heavy-hearted moments with stitches on your wrists, Broken-hearted atonement with twitches on your fists. Unheard thoughts engraved in your soul, The third day I tried to save you...you lost control. Forgiveness with a burden held on my left shoulder, Impulsiveness when you're hurting, (I couldn't hold her). Bleeding and burning and living and dying.... Needing and turning and giving and crying.... It's been five long years since I’ve rested and slept, I try to smile but in my dreams even the angels wept. Date Written: May 1, 2016

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Date: 2/2/2017 2:21:00 AM
Very touching... Kudos on the fabulous win, Laura... :)
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Lu Loo
Date: 2/4/2017 1:14:00 PM
thank you Shilpa :)-luloo
Date: 2/1/2017 9:18:00 PM
Congrats 35/40 well done nice win!
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Lu Loo
Date: 2/4/2017 1:13:00 PM
Thank you dear John! I am honored to share a first place! God bless :)-luloo
Date: 6/9/2016 5:37:00 PM
You shared loss flawlessly - Congrats on your win in the "Any Poem You Ever Penned" poetry contest. I enjoyed your work - Jesse
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Date: 5/11/2016 1:34:00 PM
Hey, stopping back by to say congrats on your contest win...I can't say that I'm surprised, this is excellent. -G
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Lu Loo
Date: 5/11/2016 8:52:00 PM
many thanks, have a great night :)-luloo
Date: 5/8/2016 2:02:00 AM
Congrats on your great win with your beautifully penned poem
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Lu Loo
Date: 5/8/2016 12:54:00 PM
many thanks Broken Wings :)-luloo
Date: 5/7/2016 6:37:00 PM
A sad piece indeed. Sorry about that Laura. Congrats for your top placement in the contest.
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Lu Loo
Date: 5/8/2016 12:54:00 PM
thank you Teddy :)-luloo
Date: 5/7/2016 6:29:00 PM
Congrats on taking second place. I am sorry to read below this is about your sister's passing.
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Lu Loo
Date: 5/7/2016 6:32:00 PM
thank you Rob very much, it's funny I just read your Slovakia poem a few seconds ago, and I look at my comments and you commented on mine! too funny..thank you again have a great night :)-luloo
Date: 5/7/2016 2:44:00 PM
Congratulations, dear Luloo, on your fine 2nd Place win in this Premiere Contest for your lovely, but so very sad poem. Hugs, Sandra
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Lu Loo
Date: 5/7/2016 4:44:00 PM
awww you are so sweet Sandra! Many thanks again! :)-luloo
Date: 5/7/2016 10:35:00 AM
Congratulations Laura:) I told you this would win:) I love the way you made it rhyme:) Sorry about your sister:)
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Lu Loo
Date: 5/7/2016 1:09:00 PM
thank you Jo for always being so sweet :)-luloo
Date: 5/7/2016 9:20:00 AM
Hi Luloo, Firstly, congratulations both for the POTD and for your second place win in the contest. This is such a sad write Luloo, you have bared your heart and the pain flows forth. This is an excellent write. Whether in pain or joy, your heart does sing. Your sister smiles on you. This is a seven and into my faves. Hugs....Mike. XX
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Lu Loo
Date: 5/7/2016 10:18:00 AM
awww..thank you Mike, you are very sweet, as always :)-luloo
Date: 5/7/2016 8:50:00 AM
Congratulations on your win, Laura. I know your sister is with you and feels your aching hearrt
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Lu Loo
Date: 5/7/2016 10:16:00 AM
thank you sweet lady :)-luloo
Date: 5/7/2016 7:56:00 AM
Back to congratulate you again...
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Lu Loo
Date: 5/7/2016 10:16:00 AM
thank you Charlie :)-luloo
Date: 5/7/2016 7:06:00 AM
Congrats this heart wrenching poem. Could feel the devastating loss. So sorry you lots your sister.
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Lu Loo
Date: 5/7/2016 10:14:00 AM
thank you Susan :)-luloo
Date: 5/6/2016 9:07:00 PM
Laura, there are, to me, so many intermingled interpretations to this poem. I had to read it several times and each read led me to another plausible conclusion. Great job on the theme and thanks for entering the contest.
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Lu Loo
Date: 5/6/2016 10:31:00 PM
Thank you John so much. I loved writing this, which may be scary? Haha but honestly, this may be my fave poem I've ever written about my sisters death. I am utterly honored and thank you so much. Have a great night many thanks-luloo:)
Date: 5/6/2016 7:20:00 AM
One of your best Laura, you do this theme very well, I love couplets so the form really combined well with your emotional write. Congrats on POTD
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Lu Loo
Date: 5/6/2016 7:44:00 AM
thank you John, very much, you are always so kind..:)-luloo
Date: 5/3/2016 9:47:00 PM
Congrats on POTD! Quite a write!
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Lu Loo
Date: 5/4/2016 10:16:00 AM
thank youWalter :)-luloo
Date: 5/3/2016 12:56:00 PM
A 7 for sure, Luloo. Lovely and heart-wrenching. Congrats on POTD. Janice
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Lu Loo
Date: 5/3/2016 1:06:00 PM
awww thank you Janice :)-luloo
Date: 5/3/2016 12:54:00 PM
- Congratulation on your p.o.t.d., Laura - // Anne-Lise :)
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Lu Loo
Date: 5/3/2016 1:05:00 PM
thank you Anne-Lise! I was shocked! :)-luloo
Date: 5/3/2016 11:21:00 AM
Great entry, great accolade as POTD, congratulations Luloo...
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Lu Loo
Date: 5/3/2016 12:14:00 PM
Thank you Charlie :)-luloo
Date: 5/3/2016 11:13:00 AM
Wonderful Couplet, well chosen for poem of the day. Congrats
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Lu Loo
Date: 5/3/2016 11:18:00 AM
Thank you sweet Anisha! You are always so sweet: )-luloo
Date: 5/3/2016 9:03:00 AM
Oh so sad, Laura, but so beautifully expressed with such deep emotion. So worthy of Poem Of The Day honor. Hugs, Sandra
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Lu Loo
Date: 5/3/2016 11:17:00 AM
Awwww thank you sweet lady Sandra: )-luloo
Date: 5/3/2016 8:54:00 AM
Wow--------superb. A brilliant couplet. I was captivated from beginning to end.Congratulation for POTD..........//:)hugs
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Lu Loo
Date: 5/3/2016 11:16:00 AM
Many thanks Manmath:)-luloo
Date: 5/3/2016 12:42:00 AM
I like this poem. Just touches my heart:) A fave and a 7:) Sure to win:)Good luck:)
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Lu Loo
Date: 5/3/2016 11:14:00 AM
Thank you Jo!-:) -Luloo
Date: 5/2/2016 1:57:00 PM
This is awesome... Thank you so much for this wonderful share
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Lu Loo
Date: 5/2/2016 3:45:00 PM
thank you Funom have a blessed night :)-luloo
Date: 5/2/2016 4:37:00 AM
Painfully and emotionally written of lost love! I wonder how long it takes to get over being abused and mistreated? Good luck!
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Lu Loo
Date: 5/2/2016 12:28:00 PM
many thanks Balveen:)-luloo
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