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i know a young girl lives just up da ill she a black an white child she got uge black eyes wit lots of white surrounden dem an' she  got tick black air an' er skin's a lonely gray she got big plump lips  no man ever touched cause she still jus' a child an' dat girl she wear a sweater white 'er mom made er da black 'n white girl live just up the ill from me even er ome is black 'n white man dat girl  she don't show color no ow dat girl in black 'n white  oh yeah!  all black 'n white  oh yeah!  till she bring out er violin er full colored playin' instrumen dat ting got chromaticity oh yeah!  dat wat I said  oh yeah! chromaticity  dat der's wat dat violin got wen she play dat ting  everytin goes bright whoa dem strings dey speak  whoa dem strings dey sing den dat violin color er world dat wat make 'er special dat violin  you got to see er when she hug dat ting when she make it sing an' da world she is peace wen da black 'n white girl  play er colored violin chromaticity  dat wat dat girl got wen she play so sweet wit the violin to er ear an' da traffic stops an' da crowds don talk wen da girl in black 'n white wen dat girl she paint da town make dat violin talk  charmin' all da ears ow she do dat  make notes dance in the sky ow she do dat  soothes the savage beast ow she soothe my ears ow she make docile dis devil me HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA !!!! i don wanna do bad  wen dat violin sings ow she do dat dat girl wit dose  magic strings 26~12~2014 Sponsor: Mystic Rose Contest Name: Let The Music Play On

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Date: 1/18/2015 12:12:00 PM
I just love dialect poems! what a fine job you did- a fav & a 7 Light & Love
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Date: 1/9/2015 1:45:00 PM
I quite enjoyed this, but for some reason could not see any picture
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Date: 12/29/2014 8:33:00 AM
One of the best poems I have read this year! I am truly impressed!
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Date: 12/28/2014 8:52:00 AM
Interesting work..Using the slang wouldn't be easy..I bet this one was difficult to write..Reads like a winner to me..Sara
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Date: 12/27/2014 2:39:00 PM
I can hear dat fiddle, a'play'in all tru dat piece. Unique, colorful and wonderfully painted.
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Date: 12/26/2014 9:33:00 PM
well, talk about your original poem. It does not get any more unique than this, Maurice! I enjoyed the fun dialect you used here and it was great how you ran with the "black and white" picture theme!! She is such a pretty girl in that picture. I just wish i too could have an original thought how to do this one!!
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Date: 12/26/2014 9:45:00 AM
Very smooth...love the narrator ...gl my friend
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Date: 12/26/2014 7:38:00 AM
Ow yeah I can listen to that violin all day and catch a rainbow when she sings.Maurice you never cease to amaze me..Awesome.
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Date: 12/26/2014 6:20:00 AM
love the language you have used to structured the flow of the poem - very cleverly penned Maurice and your own unique style:-) Good luck:-) Hugs jan xx
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Date: 12/26/2014 6:14:00 AM
Hey Mon, you got my vot---wat dime der band start !
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