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Crippled Ships

Neptune's net strikes on floating flames Her souls sounding faint gossamer goodbyes Ocean's octaves murmur mute Dim dives to a regretful reef Blue grief blurs, sailors say In twilight tides, widows whisper Their lost laments for crippled ships 12/19/21

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Date: 12/30/2021 12:50:00 PM
Michelle, a nice write on the Neptune. HNY ~ Debra
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Date: 12/28/2021 2:13:00 PM
This is a real stunner Michelle. From the vision of lamenting widows to your glorious imagery. Outstanding! Have a wonderful new year. Blessings xxoo
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Date: 12/28/2021 11:51:00 AM
I see you love water and ocean waves, fluid poetry here, nicely done dear friend, keep well :)
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Date: 12/27/2021 7:48:00 PM
Fantabulous utilization of the English language, Michelle. Your phraseology is as deep as the ocean of which you write --- and takes time and effort on the part of the reader for it to sink in. Masterful! Joy forever, Gershon
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Date: 12/25/2021 3:45:00 PM
Michelle, a striking salute to the power of the deep blue sea, and the sadness its depths can bring. Are we taming the waves, or are they taming us? I particularly love the line 'Ocean's octaves murmur mute'. Great alliterations and compact writing. I fondly foresee a wondrous win with this nautical narrative. Merry Christmas, friend ~ John
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Date: 12/23/2021 11:41:00 AM
Really good alliteration, Michelle! "in twilight tides, widows whisper" so beautiful. Good luck in contest :)
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Date: 12/22/2021 3:14:00 PM
Fine alliteration, Michelle. Enjoyed the poem. Good luck! A poet friend, Bill Merry Christmas!
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Date: 12/21/2021 1:32:00 AM
Sometimes alliteration causes the tongue to be tied, but yours is well done, Michelle.
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Date: 12/20/2021 2:35:00 PM
Many have lost their lives at sea, it must be one of the most dangerous jobs in the world. Best of luck in the contest Michelle. Merry Christmas. Tom
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Date: 12/20/2021 10:27:00 AM
Well said, but Davey Jones is now welcoming astronauts, too! Enjoyed!
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Date: 12/20/2021 9:19:00 AM
I enjoyed your "Crippled Ships" write. Glad to see a new write from you. Have a Blessed Christmas and 2022.....................
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Date: 12/20/2021 5:09:00 AM
Twilight tides, windows whisper--great vocabulary, as always, Michelle, in your splendid alliteration.
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Date: 12/19/2021 11:19:00 PM
MICHELLE, thanks for writing this and for all your presence during 2021. many of s were buoyed when a great cascade washed over us, by your well-chosen, beautiful ... words. shalom shalom & holiday cheer. anil deo
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Date: 12/19/2021 5:47:00 PM
This was an exciting read, Michelle, with excellent metaphors. I wish you luck in the contest.
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