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Coming Undone

this very night unfolds the darkness as the stitches of memory unravel with time I see you in the loop of mind on the threads of thoughts trying to poke holes in my existence I feel you ripping me apart at the seams my torn heart and tattered soul struggle to mend themselves whole again spools of life dangle before me yet these eyes can't see past memories any more than these hands can tie the knot to close the gap nor stop the frays of darkness that unravel me 02/03/20

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Date: 5/26/2020 1:27:00 PM
This is such a beautiful piece Sandra! I could relate to the journey I experienced reading it from ripping the stitches to the inability to tie the frayed memories. Heartfelt one! Congratulations on your win :)
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Date: 5/25/2020 8:38:00 PM
So subliminal and straight from the heart. Your gut dear poet speaks loud yet softly and the same time!!! Love it
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Date: 5/25/2020 7:15:00 PM
Congrats Sandy on another tremendous write, and another top win!
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John Hamilton
Date: 5/26/2020 9:43:00 AM
it says something when most of your writes have already won in my contests, miss your writing!
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Sandra Adams
Date: 5/25/2020 7:20:00 PM
Thank you John... hard to chose for your contest... most my best either were winners in your contests or too long for the guidelines...I have some long powerful ones... I am honored that you enjoyed this one....hugs
Date: 2/8/2020 10:15:00 AM
This certainly deserves to stand alone much higher - perhaps first in the contest and not tied for 8th place. Brian's a congenial old bloke but runs contests without as much consideration as poets deserve and you deserve more consideration. But then, to each their own I guess.
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Sandra Adams
Date: 2/8/2020 10:45:00 AM
Thank you so much Craig, you are too kind and your comments always make me smile... :) hugs
Date: 2/7/2020 11:46:00 AM
Congratulations Sandy on your richly deserved win. Blessings, Jennifer.
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Sandra Adams
Date: 2/8/2020 10:43:00 AM
Thank you so much Jennifer.... hugs
Date: 2/7/2020 7:47:00 AM
Hey there, congrats my friend on your placement in this contest. Your poetry just consistently shines your talent for everyone to see. Your words are magical.
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Sandra Adams
Date: 2/7/2020 9:55:00 AM
thank you so much Chris.... you are too kind :) hugs
Date: 2/6/2020 3:54:00 PM
Sandra congrats on your win my friend!;)
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Sandra Adams
Date: 2/6/2020 6:42:00 PM
Thank you so much...I am way behind in everything, I hadn't even noticed the win ….
Date: 2/5/2020 11:05:00 PM
A heart that is hurting - very sad - filled with passion and emotion Sandy and written with the flair of a poetess that only you can do. Blessings, Jennifer.
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Sandra Adams
Date: 2/6/2020 5:02:00 AM
What a kind thing to say. Thank you so much Jennifer. Hugs and blessings to you :)
Date: 2/5/2020 5:09:00 PM
A beautiful contrast, Sandra.
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Sandra Adams
Date: 2/6/2020 5:01:00 AM
Thank you so much Caren. Hugs
Date: 2/5/2020 12:30:00 PM
Somewhat painfully sad, well penned with emotion.
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Sandra Adams
Date: 2/5/2020 12:32:00 PM
Thank you emotion is one thing my muse likes :) hugs
Date: 2/5/2020 11:22:00 AM
Metaphorically portraying sadness and dark moments which could easily rip a heart apart, Sandra. Excellent. ~ Hugs // paul
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Sandra Adams
Date: 2/5/2020 12:29:00 PM
Thank you so much Paul:) hugs
Date: 2/4/2020 8:06:00 PM
Brutally effective extended metaphor there, my friend. (No 'scribble,' this, methinks). Here's to 'recovery.' Best always, Gershon
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Sandra Adams
Date: 2/4/2020 8:51:00 PM
Lol not a scribble. Deep metaphor. Hugs :)
Date: 2/4/2020 8:51:00 AM
Your emotions are so vivid, and your pictures... with words, demand attention... they make sure you see as well as read all that you intend. Wonderful... Expertly done... Ann
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Sandra Adams
Date: 2/4/2020 2:34:00 PM
Thank you so much Ann. Your comment made me smile :) hugs
Date: 2/4/2020 4:26:00 AM
Gorgeous yet dark sandy! I do love it!;)
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Sandra Adams
Date: 2/4/2020 2:33:00 PM
Thank you Brenda. I often walk on the dark side :)
Date: 2/3/2020 2:32:00 PM
Quite a dark and sad verse from the free verse queen. You write these so well Sandra Tom.
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Sandra Adams
Date: 2/3/2020 6:54:00 PM
Thank you Tom...never been called that before :) darkness seems to fall easiest from my muse, though i do try and mix it up some... hugs
Date: 2/3/2020 2:12:00 PM
- A blanket of darkness, Sandra ... deep and excellent written - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Sandra Adams
Date: 2/3/2020 6:51:00 PM
Thank you so much Anne-Lise :) hugs
Date: 2/3/2020 12:51:00 PM
Out of darkness comes light, out of sadness joy dearest , Sandra. Very well done! Hugs xxx
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Sandra Adams
Date: 2/3/2020 6:52:00 PM
Thank you Demetrios...it is always darkest right before the light shines :) hugs
Date: 2/3/2020 11:40:00 AM
Excellent write, Sandy--it delivers the saddened feelings and leaves a lingering impact--expertly done.
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Sandra Adams
Date: 2/3/2020 12:04:00 PM
Thank you so much Vijay when I wrote it last night I saved it .. I had to read it this morning before posting it. Cold meds had my thinking unclear :) hugs
Date: 2/3/2020 10:39:00 AM
Wow, that was dark and it feels so lonely my friend. Sadness takes on a new beauty when it is dressed in your words.
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Sandra Adams
Date: 2/3/2020 10:46:00 AM
Thank you Chris...i wrote this last night but saved it to post today when i could read it again...i am taking cough medicine that makes me groggy at night so i couldn't read it and take it in, i was too tired....hugs

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