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cluttered like a lawn on a blustery autumn day these thoughts scattered about in my mind my pen like a rake can't corral them to make any sense so they rest momentarily before being aloft in a spiral of winded breaths landing wherever they may just waiting to be gathered into neat little piles somewhere again

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Date: 2/17/2020 4:17:00 PM
This was lovely. Ann
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Sandra Adams
Date: 2/18/2020 9:19:00 AM
Thank you so much Ann... hugs
Date: 2/17/2020 10:27:00 AM
Though I feel this should have taken a top spot, congrats on your place in this contest. All of your poetry is a winner to me.
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Sandra Adams
Date: 2/18/2020 9:18:00 AM
Thank you so much...it was just a scribble but I liked the metaphor in it so I entered it... hugs
Date: 2/15/2020 9:56:00 PM
Well-done. Love the extended metaphor. They call this 'poetry,' methinks. :) Gershon
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Sandra Adams
Date: 2/16/2020 5:07:00 PM
Thank you so very much Gershon life has been busy... hugs
Date: 2/15/2020 3:19:00 PM
Nice metaphor.
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Sandra Adams
Date: 2/16/2020 5:06:00 PM
thank you so very much Juliet :) hugs
Date: 2/13/2020 6:44:00 PM
Hello Sandra … I guess many of our PC's need a good clean out of unwanted documents etc. too. That is clutter and also needs a spring clean. Very good verse that certainly had me thinking about my own clutter - thank you Sandra - Lindsay
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Sandra Adams
Date: 2/13/2020 8:15:00 PM
Thank you Linsay… luckily I have a brand new uncluttered computer...but my mind is cluttered, as is my bus with all leftover winter garments the kids leave behind and all the paperwork they keep giving me, I feel like I have an office on wheels and no filing space... :(
Date: 2/13/2020 4:21:00 PM
Sandra, your pen did a very nice job of corralling thoughts for this word painting. Excellent ~ John
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Sandra Adams
Date: 2/13/2020 8:13:00 PM
Thank you so much John... hugs
Date: 2/13/2020 10:31:00 AM
They way you use words to paint with is amazing to me. This was fantastic, I could see this and understand where it was coming from. Beautifully done Sandy.
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Sandra Adams
Date: 2/13/2020 8:12:00 PM
Thank you so much for such a kind comment Chris..it certainly brought a smile on a dreary evening... hugs
Date: 2/13/2020 9:18:00 AM
Sandra, A totally satisfying analogy for the state of clutter in this poem. It's time for Spring cleaning with deliberation and meditation for many of us. I may need to borrow your rake. -Richard
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Sandra Adams
Date: 2/13/2020 8:11:00 PM
Thank you so much Richard... always willing to lend a rake to a friend... hugs
Date: 2/13/2020 6:42:00 AM
This is awesome my friend-- every word captivates--beautifully done, Sandy.
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Sandra Adams
Date: 2/13/2020 8:11:00 PM
Thank you so much Vijay...I can't find enough time to write and read these days... schedules been too hectic to even think when I do find a spare moment... hugs
Date: 2/13/2020 5:49:00 AM
WoW! Sandra, Good take on clutter. Clever comparison as well. You are an amazing writer. Have a wonderful day:-) Alexis
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Sandra Adams
Date: 2/13/2020 8:10:00 PM
aww Thank you so much Alexis... you made me smile tonight... hugs
Date: 2/13/2020 2:33:00 AM
So true...also applicable to masses of people too...
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Sandra Adams
Date: 2/13/2020 8:09:00 PM
Thank you Arturo.... applicable to many things.... hugs
Date: 2/12/2020 10:55:00 PM
I like this comparison very much. Well done.
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Sandra Adams
Date: 2/13/2020 8:07:00 PM
Thank you so much Sheri :)

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