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Traditional Format Compassion’s finger strums another note, he listens as the angels start to sing, recalling lines from what apostles wrote, indwells the spirit held by Heaven’s king. Succinctly spoken leaving soul in tune, the gifts we need are never under trees, mosaic mustard seeds lit by the moon, aspires our gaze and prayers on bending knees. Submits himself to love and sounds of grace, mistrust no longer drowns and mutes his heart, united song with Christ, him to erase so many sins in mercy to impart. In essence, life and hope beyond today. Contrasts the world, as it dissolves away. ------------------------------------------------------- Acrostic Format Compassion’s finger strums another note, He listens as the angels start to sing, Recalling lines from what apostles wrote, Indwells the spirit held by Heaven’s king. Succinctly spoken leaving soul in tune, The gifts we need are never under trees, Mosaic mustard seeds lit by the moon, Aspires our gaze and prayers on bending knees. Submits himself to love and sounds of grace, Mistrust no longer drowns and mutes his heart, United song with Christ, him to erase So many sins in mercy to impart. In essence, life and hope beyond today. Contrasts the world, as it dissolves away. ----------------------------------------------------- Written: 12.16.15 Most recently entered Contest: Shakespearean Sonnet Sponsor: Carolyn Devonshire w/ co-judge Jack Thorne Previously entered Contest: Your absolute best Sponsor: The Seeker Previously entered Contest: A Christmas Sonnet Acrostic Sponsor: Andrea Dietrich

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Date: 2/10/2019 8:44:00 AM
My friend, I truly enjoyed reading this superb sonnet with its beauty, depth and important message delivered in such inspiring verses. A fav.. your sonnets are awesome creations..
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Rob Carmack
Date: 2/10/2019 11:03:00 AM
Thank you very much Robert.
Date: 10/28/2018 10:35:00 AM
This is one of the very best winning entries, Rob! I am here referring to both the content and technical presentation. Deserved congratulations for your high flying win. // paul
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Rob Carmack
Date: 10/28/2018 9:01:00 PM
Thank You Paul.
Date: 10/28/2018 12:18:00 AM
Wow, rob, this is outstanding- congrats! The dual-form is clever.. I'm particularly fond of the 2nd stanza and your use of a subtler alliteration e.g. "succinctly spoken...soul" and "mosaic mustard..moon." This 2-1 pattern is a brilliant way to create the harmonious repetition of sounds without the sometimes overbearing nature of the "Peter Piper"-type alliteration. The consonance with "s" sound in "aspires our gaze and prayers on bending knees" is very smooth and luxurious as well.
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Rob Carmack
Date: 10/28/2018 9:00:00 PM
Thank you Nemo for taking the time to read and comment on my poem. Honestly, the 2-1 pattern was not by design and I had not noticed it before this comment. It gives me some ideas about future writings. I look forward to you posting more poems.
Date: 10/27/2018 2:11:00 PM
This is really beautiful. Congratulations on your win with this thoughtful and cleverly acrostic poem. Best wishes. Deb
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Rob Carmack
Date: 10/27/2018 9:06:00 PM
TY Deb.
Date: 10/26/2018 11:36:00 PM
Beautifully written, Rob. Both Jack and I enjoyed your lovely sonnet. Congratulations on your win!
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Rob Carmack
Date: 10/27/2018 9:05:00 PM
Thank You Carolyn. Please thank Jack for me.
Date: 3/29/2016 3:22:00 PM
still waiting, Rob!!!
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Rob Carmack
Date: 3/30/2016 9:06:00 AM
I don't know if you remember that farmhouse story I told you about, but I am going to write a poem about it, just saw a contest that I think fits it well.
Date: 2/25/2016 1:41:00 PM
Beautiful poem my lovely friend, bl
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Date: 2/1/2016 12:22:00 PM
This is a GREAT sonnet! Congrats on your well-deserved win. I don't know how I missed out on this one earlier! Janice
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Date: 1/21/2016 3:59:00 PM
So glad my contest inspired you with this one. I am waiting for a new one. Maybe you can do a quatern. That is going to be my next contest if I can ever get the dang thing up!
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Date: 1/15/2016 10:10:00 AM
I am impressed with this achievement and I see it placed. A lot of talent went into this and I feel it is lovely, simply lovely. Congrats on your win ... CayCay - 7
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Date: 1/14/2016 8:19:00 PM
Many acrostics sacrifice the poetry for the acrostic, here its quite the opposite, great write!
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Date: 1/7/2016 5:14:00 AM
a beauty for me, rob.. got more?.. huggs
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Date: 1/3/2016 5:06:00 PM
I'm glad how you were attracted to this form and hope to see you try it again and again!!
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Date: 12/31/2015 9:49:00 AM
"The gifts we need are never under trees" is my absolute favorite line. Well expressed my friend. Happy New Year. You are a positive part of the poetry soup famous family Rob.
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 1/3/2016 5:06:00 PM
He sure is!!
Date: 12/30/2015 11:08:00 AM
simply divine, rob... sending my fine congrats!..huggs
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Date: 12/26/2015 8:06:00 PM
A wonderful Sonnet/Acrostic write, Rob. Congratulations on your fine win. Sandra
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Date: 12/25/2015 10:14:00 PM
2-in-1 Sonnet and Acrostic... Rob, Merry Christmas and Happy New Year May all your days shine and dreams come true. :) Every day should be a day with family and friends. I appreciate everyone. Sorry to all those I have taken for granted. SHAME ON ME. I promise, 2016 will be a new me. Merry Christmas!!! May the true meaning of the holiday season fill your heart and home. Always & Forever ~LINDA~
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Date: 12/25/2015 2:38:00 PM
ROB, Congratulations on your win :) Merry Christmas and Happy New Year! SKAT
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Date: 12/25/2015 2:17:00 PM
A lovely and worthy Christmas offering, Rob. This was no easy attempt at uniting both sonnet and acrostic forms together. Congrats on your win. ~ Hope you've been having a lovely Christmas! ~ Regards // paul
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Date: 12/24/2015 9:50:00 PM
Congratulations on your win with this magnificent, spiritual piece! Awesome flow and imagery - I love it! Pandita
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Date: 12/24/2015 9:17:00 PM
I really like the sixth line...A beautiful spiritual write Rob... Congrats on the win ...Merry Christmas!
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Date: 12/24/2015 7:38:00 PM
Beautifully composed and rendered! Even though it is an ACROSTIC it flows smoothly and not clumsily as some acrostics are wont to do. Impeccable language and vivid imagery. Well done my friend! Best wishes, Keith
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Keith Bickerstaffe
Date: 12/24/2015 8:57:00 PM
Season's Greetings to you too my friend, Keith
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Rob Carmack
Date: 12/24/2015 8:18:00 PM
Thank you Keith. As soon as I read the details of her contest when she posted it, I knew I would be giving it a try. I am happy with the flow, except for maybe the middle. I got to a point where messing with it anymore, would have changed the message too much. Thank you for taking the time to read and comment. Merry Christmas.
Date: 12/24/2015 4:30:00 PM
This was a smart write on music, ROb. I especially loved the first few lines. And your meter is pretty dang good!!! Loved the images about the mustard seed and gifts need never be under trees. I kind of wish I had scored this one a tad higher upon seeing it again! Congrats in my contest.
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Rob Carmack
Date: 12/24/2015 7:32:00 PM
I am happy with my placement, especially since our styles are not each other's favorite. Thanks for coming up with this contest, I was strongly drawn to it and it was nice to write in meter again. Merry Christmas.
Date: 12/22/2015 10:38:00 AM
Dear Rob A wonderful spiritual poem here my friend perfect for this magical holiday coming right around the corner, have a Merry Christmas and a very happy new year, and thanks for your review on my poem also, have a great week, cheri
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Rob Carmack
Date: 12/23/2015 9:28:00 AM
Thank you and a Merry Christmas to you too.
Date: 12/22/2015 12:13:00 AM
A clever combo and a very worthy write, Rob, a nicely written testament to the truth, sadly often hidden beneath a huge steaming pile of commercialism. I'm sure you will do well with this piece. Regards, Viv
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Rob Carmack
Date: 12/23/2015 9:19:00 AM
Thank you Viv and Happy Holidays.
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