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Broken My rag doll had no arms I on the streets, no home a rainy cold day an old man, a stranger hugged me no legs on the streets, discarded he fed me broken bones, penniless shared his little heart with me somehow we survived I have two children now they adore him grandpa

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Date: 10/31/2023 4:24:00 PM
I love this, Aurore; a poem which touches the heart. In life I have learned that one must never throw in the towel; somehow we'll cope and survive. ~ Regards, my friend // paul
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Aurore Severo
Date: 11/1/2023 12:39:00 AM
Thank you so much Paul
Date: 10/23/2023 4:46:00 AM
Ah, tear drop fell xo
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Date: 9/17/2023 12:20:00 AM
Aurore this made me emotional….so very moving and so very beautiful! I love the line “shared his little heart with me” such sweetness in that line! Deb x
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Aurore Severo
Date: 10/21/2023 12:43:00 AM
Thank you :) :) :)
Date: 9/3/2023 5:35:00 AM
This is quirky and impactful. You told a lifetime in a few seconds. Well done.
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Aurore Severo
Date: 9/16/2023 6:30:00 PM
Thank you Richard, I tried my best.
Date: 8/31/2023 2:36:00 PM
There is a beat or maybe offbeat to your unique poetry, bohemian natured perhaps. The words stunning to feel your life, Aurore. Sad but true, all for a greater reason. Enjoyed your experience, ~Anaya
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Aurore Severo
Date: 9/16/2023 6:30:00 PM
Thank you very much :)
Date: 8/28/2023 12:57:00 PM
This is such a moving write. The way you’ve written this and how it flows so seamlessly with excellent storytelling truly touched my heart. Love this. And a kind hand and gesture could do wonders, such beautiful stories need to be read and told more often. Soul warming really
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Aurore Severo
Date: 9/16/2023 6:31:00 PM
You are very kind, thank very much. :)
Date: 8/27/2023 2:50:00 PM
Your imagery and straight-forward approach is engaging and goes straight to the heart of the reader. The journey is painful, but your close brings a joy to my heart. Thanks for sharing the good side of humanity in a world filled with evil deeds. Smiles ~ Blessings Bill
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Bill Baker
Date: 10/21/2023 1:20:00 AM
Just visit when you can, Aurore, it was nice to hear your voice through your poetry. Hugs, Bill
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Aurore Severo
Date: 9/16/2023 6:32:00 PM
Thank you Bill, I wish I had more time to be here, and post and read more lovely poetry here.
Date: 8/27/2023 12:19:00 PM
A powerful emotion envelopes the reader--for every line conveys the pain of being without basics of life. I like the ending that conveys--one can overcome it all and step into a better tomorrow. So well done!
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Aurore Severo
Date: 9/16/2023 6:32:00 PM
Thank you :) :)
Date: 8/27/2023 11:23:00 AM
Your words run me through a gauntlet of emotions. I shed tears for the hardship and struggle but want to stand up and cheer for the last two lines. A powerful poem.
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Aurore Severo
Date: 9/16/2023 6:33:00 PM
Thanks so much Jerry :)
Date: 8/27/2023 7:05:00 AM
Your poem is a profound masterpiece that captivates my senses. Although I have only delved into this particular piece, its essence emanates an unparalleled depth, leaving an indelible impression upon my soul. Your words possess a remarkable ability to transport me to a world of profound emotions and experiences, urging me to eagerly anticipate your future creations. Thanks for your comment on my page
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Aurore Severo
Date: 9/16/2023 6:29:00 PM
Thank you, you are too kind.
Date: 8/27/2023 4:51:00 AM
i've only read this one, but immediately it shows me a unique, intense and impactful writer - keep writing and posting!
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Aurore Severo
Date: 9/16/2023 6:29:00 PM
Thank you so much Charlotte, I really appreciate the encouragement. :)
Date: 8/27/2023 4:43:00 AM
such a touching piece, you brought tears to my eyes Aurore. hugs jan x
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Aurore Severo
Date: 9/16/2023 6:28:00 PM
Many thanks for kind words Jan :)
Date: 8/27/2023 1:59:00 AM
Sad story you have told in poetic form. We as the average person has no idea of how many people suffer like this in a country that has so much to offer. Thanks for sharing this one with us and your visit to my page. Sara
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Aurore Severo
Date: 9/16/2023 6:28:00 PM
Thank you Sara for such kind words.
Date: 8/27/2023 1:06:00 AM
So sweet. God bless you. Love, Gina
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Aurore Severo
Date: 9/16/2023 6:27:00 PM
Thank you so much.