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Brevity—Quick Changes A brown-eyed girl named Sue; Loved to wear dresses blue. On the first day of school she saw a girl she knew Who stated, “That dress color is not suited for you.” Next morning she wore a dress of grey; She could not wait to hear what others say. A classmate shouted, “Red would look good on you. Grey is passé.” Concerned about what next might be said, She thought of her dress with bright cloth of red. Still caught in a quandary, She searched dirty laundry. And found what she had, Proudly she chose a favorite plaid.

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Date: 7/15/2015 10:21:00 PM
....and hopefully no other girl turned up in the same outfit. Congratulations on your win, Barbara. Viv x
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Barbara Campbell
Date: 7/16/2015 3:10:00 PM
Interesting conceptualization. Thanks, Barbara
Date: 7/15/2015 1:41:00 AM
Hi Barbara, Congrats on your win. Always & Forever ~LINDA~
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Barbara Campbell
Date: 7/16/2015 3:11:00 PM
Thanks, Barbara
Date: 7/14/2015 12:06:00 AM
Barbara, Congratulations on your sweet win. Love SKAT
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Barbara Campbell
Date: 7/14/2015 3:50:00 PM
What a nice comment. Thank you! Barbara
Date: 7/13/2015 12:29:00 PM
Congratulations on your great wining entry Barbara!
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Barbara Campbell
Date: 7/13/2015 12:46:00 PM
Thank you. Appreciate your thought. Barbara
Date: 7/13/2015 12:08:00 PM
Dropping back with my congrats Barbara:-) hugs Jan xx
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Jan Allison
Date: 7/13/2015 12:57:00 PM
I do for the original comment Barbara but usually just say congrats if I have read the poems before:-) hugs Jan xx
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Barbara Campbell
Date: 7/13/2015 12:48:00 PM
I know that you put a great deal of time and thought into your responses. I most certainly appreciate the effort. Barbara
Date: 7/13/2015 8:42:00 AM
I really enjoyed this! Thank you for entering and big grats on your win ;-)
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Barbara Campbell
Date: 7/13/2015 9:55:00 AM
Thanks for your support and interest. I also appreciate your taking the time to comment. Would you let me know why there are several "one's", "two's" and "three's". This is something I have yet to figure out. Tx Barbara
Date: 7/6/2015 4:30:00 PM
Very clever rhyme - sadly times never change and this type of things still goes on in schools:- hugs jan xx
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Jan Allison
Date: 7/8/2015 1:47:00 AM
I work part time in a school too so can relate to this so much! :-) hugs Jan xx
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Barbara Campbell
Date: 7/7/2015 8:53:00 PM
Thanks so much for the positive comment. I work in a school/part-time, and see the same issues again and again. A hug back to you, Barbara

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