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From an insufferable, unceasing rain of disappointment, I try to hide my scars under the cloak of a smile. Alas, this master of disguise, fools but one. My dreams are like a reverent prayer that's lost its relevance to love. Shrouded in ominous clouds of deception, I am a refugee of doubt with no joy in reality. I wade through poems that never rhyme, from memories that never mend. I cower from this rumbling squall of loneliness and shrink from the shards of misdirected words. The mantle of hope escapes my ambitions, forever silencing my courage. I am drowning in discontent. Brainstorm Contest Sponsored by John Hamilton 10/16/2018 1st. Place

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Warren Doll

Date: 11/19/2018 8:19:00 AM

Hi Charlie, congratulations on your number 1 win. Well deserved for this magnificent poem. I especially liked the last two lines, Warm wishes~ Warren

Charlie Smith
Date: 11/25/2018 11:03:00 AM

Thank you Warren...

Arthur Vaso

Date: 11/14/2018 11:29:00 PM

A poem that resonates with me, loved this one!

Charlie Smith
Date: 11/15/2018 11:45:00 AM

Thank you Arthur...

Sara Kendrick

Date: 11/14/2018 3:06:00 PM

Congrats on your winning work. Way to go. A very sad last line. I hope that the situation has improved. Thanks for stopping by. Sara

Charlie Smith
Date: 11/15/2018 11:44:00 AM

Thank you Sara...

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/5/2018 6:30:00 PM

I am seeing congrats here and that you took first place as well. BIG congrats. It was so well deserved.

Charlie Smith
Date: 11/15/2018 11:44:00 AM

Thank you Andrea...

Lin Lane

Date: 11/1/2018 12:47:00 PM

Dear Charlie, I applaud your lines and your win with these words. My favorite lines are: "My dreams are like a reverent prayer that's lost its relevance to love."

Charlie Smith
Date: 11/1/2018 12:56:00 PM

thank you Lin...

Jay Moore

Date: 10/29/2018 2:57:00 AM

Man you said! Deep, Great job

Charlie Smith
Date: 10/29/2018 1:19:00 PM

Thank you Jay...

Caycay Jennings

Date: 10/27/2018 8:06:00 PM

You did crazy most profoundly, Charlie. I am honored to share first place with you, and I am pleased - smiling. Poetry hugs ... CayCay

Charlie Smith
Date: 10/28/2018 10:19:00 AM

The honor was all mine...

Warren Doll

Date: 10/26/2018 9:51:00 PM

Charlie a very well deserved 1st place. This is brilliant and a fav for me~ Warren

Charlie Smith
Date: 10/26/2018 9:53:00 PM

Thanks Warren...

Kai Michael Neumann

Date: 10/26/2018 11:15:00 AM

Sorry, my words got ahead of me...not without an inkling of hope flowing from your pen...Kind wishes, Kai

Charlie Smith
Date: 10/26/2018 9:44:00 PM

It's ok...

Kai Michael Neumann

Date: 10/26/2018 11:14:00 AM

Wow. Amazing, insightful and heartfelt. And not with (so I hope) an inkling of ink, retrieved with the ink of your pen. Congratulations on your win, Kai

Charlie Smith
Date: 10/26/2018 9:44:00 PM

Thank you Kai...

Debjani Mitra

Date: 10/25/2018 11:32:00 PM

This is so poignant .. I read it earlier also twice and had a brainstorm ..that this will win

Charlie Smith
Date: 10/26/2018 9:34:00 AM

Thank you Debjani...

Deb Radke

Date: 10/25/2018 6:59:00 PM

Congratulations on your fine piece of writing taking first place in the contest. Very well deserved. Deb

Charlie Smith
Date: 10/26/2018 9:33:00 AM

Thank you Deb...

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 10/25/2018 1:44:00 PM

- Back to congratulate, Charlie :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Charlie Smith
Date: 10/26/2018 9:33:00 AM

Thank you Anne-Lise,,,

John Hamilton

Date: 10/25/2018 12:41:00 PM

This is a spectacular write Charlie, I think my fave from you, congrats on a great shared win!

Charlie Smith
Date: 10/26/2018 9:32:00 AM

Thanks for sponsoring the contest and for your generous consideration...

Joanna Daniel

Date: 10/22/2018 6:21:00 AM

A great poem for the contest, Charlie :)

Charlie Smith
Date: 10/22/2018 11:42:00 AM

Thank you Jo...

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/20/2018 11:36:00 PM

You did this SO well, Charlie. I hope it's a winner for you. I simply could not get the muse to come to me for this one!!

Charlie Smith
Date: 10/22/2018 11:42:00 AM

Thank you Andrea...

Vladislav Raven

Date: 10/20/2018 2:08:00 PM

Hi Charlie, once again you create a wonderful, poetic gem. I love each poetic line, the imagery sings in the mind. This is one i can read again and again. Good luck in the contest. Has to be a fave Charlie. Have a wonderful weekend. Your friend always....Mike.

Charlie Smith
Date: 10/22/2018 11:42:00 AM

Thank you Mike...

Paul Callus

Date: 10/20/2018 10:20:00 AM

This is metaphorically beautiful, Charlie, and I love the poetical language and phrasing. Goes to my favs....Regards // paul

Charlie Smith
Date: 10/22/2018 11:42:00 AM

Thank you Paul...

Heidi Sands

Date: 10/19/2018 5:33:00 PM

Your words have brought us into the mind of someone in this place and this is great for the contest :)

Charlie Smith
Date: 10/20/2018 9:34:00 AM

Thank you Heidi...

Mark Peterson

Date: 10/19/2018 5:30:00 PM

Ah, I hear the turnstile click over once again, as yet another climbs into the arena, while outside the line of hopeful poets now dwindles by just one. And within, all eyes are on the dais and the collective group of thumbs. Welcome, Charlie, join hands—prepare to meet your fate.

Charlie Smith
Date: 10/20/2018 9:34:00 AM

I'm not sure this is a good thing Mark, but thank you for such a gracious thought...

Deb Radke

Date: 10/19/2018 12:02:00 PM

This is very good. Not one word is superfluous. Best wishes. I'm glad I read your poem. Deb

Charlie Smith
Date: 10/20/2018 9:35:00 AM

Thank you Deb...

Silent One

Date: 10/17/2018 3:35:00 PM

Many people will suffer or suffer from such things.. You described it very well and poetically...

Charlie Smith
Date: 10/17/2018 3:41:00 PM

Thank you SO...

Agnes Krampe

Date: 10/17/2018 3:27:00 PM

Great portrayal of what goes on in a tormented mind. I hope you feel more at peace than this.

Charlie Smith
Date: 10/17/2018 3:40:00 PM

A fictional contest response to be sure Agnes, thank you for your concern...

Winged Warrior

Date: 10/17/2018 10:09:00 AM

I know a shrink we could call...only 50 pesos...you go first...great write, Charlie...love & pesos...^WW^

Charlie Smith
Date: 10/17/2018 11:00:00 AM

You didn't send the number??? Thanks WW...

Susan Ashley

Date: 10/16/2018 9:26:00 PM

The loneliness and hopelessness of depression is expressed with melancholy emotion and metaphoric beauty, Charlie. The poignancy and exquisite ache of your verses touch me deeply. Best wishes for a win.. ~Susan

Charlie Smith
Date: 10/17/2018 10:14:00 AM

Thank you Susan...