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Back In Time: a Space Knight Blues

Before I stepped into this brave new Valley of The Tears, My mother used to sing me songs of Knights all brave and fierce. She told, as she was herself told by her own mother dear That they came from far back in time, some millions and a year. These Knights, I've never seen but with my closed eyes in her womb And in those days, they rode in holy circles in my room. The circles went all up and down like in a whirling pool, With lights and fires everywhere and seats as soft as wool. These nights of sleepless nights, as I played witches with a broom, I never knew the lights I saw were real witchcraft and gloom ! 'Twas like a fairy tale to me, with engines swirling 'round And angels white and brilliant surrounding holy ground: The pearls of white and blue beryls and stones as red as wine, and the gemstones, and amethysts and crystals so divine ! I used to travel back in time with windows open wide, But one day, the Knights came and brought me to the world outside; That's when I was born to my mother as a mammalian, Until the doctors discovered I was a reptilian... which means that for the human race, I am THE ALIEN... by Voahanitriniaina Rabary-Andriamanday from Madagascar (Antananarivo/ Ambohimalaza) 9/27/2012 - 6: 13:00 PM

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Date: 4/23/2013 8:44:00 AM
Good morning Hanitra. I enjoyed reading this one again.
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Voahanitriniaina Rabary-Andriamanday
Date: 4/27/2013 8:35:00 PM
Hi, Rick! Thanks for all your visits and kind comments! Have a nice weekend! Love, Hanitra
Date: 10/27/2012 10:50:00 AM
Beautiful, thankyou for this gift. The World is more complete by you being here. Have a great weekend.
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Date: 10/24/2012 5:30:00 AM
I so enjoyed this !! Love the twist at the end...A reptilian Alien....clever writing !! I see too that this has won in a contest..Congrats !! Well thought out poem !!
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Date: 10/23/2012 5:28:00 PM
LOL you had me going what a nice sweet story until you turn into alizard! Have you read Sheri Tepper's book Grass it's a Nebula Award winner and she has a similiar plot! Great book! Light & Love
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Voahanitriniaina Rabary-Andriamanday
Date: 10/24/2012 4:03:00 AM
OK, the lizard was a technical urgency to rhyme with "alien", in fact; but I'm not so unhappy with this ugly ending. It was a surprise that made me laugh about myself...And I just enjoyed the laughing...Maybe I should be more serious, next time! Thank you for the title; does it imply that I am the next Nebula Award winner(^_^) hahaha; Hope the best for me, Debbie dear! Love, Hanitra
Date: 10/8/2012 12:11:00 PM
This write was quite an accomplishment. Amazing. Congratulations on a great win.
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Voahanitriniaina Rabary-Andriamanday
Date: 10/24/2012 4:08:00 AM
You are so kind, Carol. But in fact, I am really very surprised and I am sailing on a cloud of bliss since then. Thank you so much for showing interest!:) Love, Hanitra
Date: 10/8/2012 12:08:00 PM
Congratulations on your placement in Nathan's "Deep Space" contest Voah. Love, Carol
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Voahanitriniaina Rabary-Andriamanday
Date: 10/24/2012 4:11:00 AM
Yeesss! Here's my Sunshine again! I'm coming to visit your poems right now! Thank you for support always! :)Love, Hanitra
Date: 10/5/2012 11:16:00 PM
wow!!! a great write!! Congratulations on your win friend Voah!! cheers!!
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Voahanitriniaina Rabary-Andriamanday
Date: 10/24/2012 4:16:00 AM
And you do have very beautiful poems! I read them with great pleasure: such a good heart and a wisdom to keep in pace with this hard life. A rare treasure! Thank you so much, Maria! Love, Hanitra
Date: 10/5/2012 5:45:00 PM
A very imaginative poem. Congrats.
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Voahanitriniaina Rabary-Andriamanday
Date: 10/24/2012 4:32:00 AM
Thank you, once more, Joann! It's so nice of you to read my work. Any critic is welcome! Love, Hanitra
Date: 10/5/2012 4:55:00 PM
Love this story poem...and the imagination is wonderful in it !! Congratulations on your win !!
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Voahanitriniaina Rabary-Andriamanday
Date: 10/24/2012 4:38:00 AM
Thank you so much, Debra! It's an ugly ending but I'll try to do better next time; I'm really getting less and less shy, thanks to your comments! Love, Hanitra
Date: 10/5/2012 4:21:00 PM
VRA, congratulations with your awesome poem in Nathan's "deep space" contest.. enjoyed~ xox~pd
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Voahanitriniaina Rabary-Andriamanday
Date: 10/24/2012 4:43:00 AM
Thanks a lot, pd. I read about Nate's ants and pants, today and there's something for you over there! Hahaha (^_^); Enjoyed it! Nate is a hearty naughty boy. Love, Hanitra
Date: 10/5/2012 3:46:00 PM
thanks for the support' nate
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Voahanitriniaina Rabary-Andriamanday
Date: 1/13/2013 4:28:00 AM
Hello, Nate! I am very pleased to remember that you were among the first poets here in our very friendly community to have inspired me and encouraged me to write in a language I am all in all not so much used to! This is my very first attempt to publish in English, so, I wanted once more to thank you for this greatest experience ever: meeting all these interesting and hearty poets on the Soup! Have a very happy new year! Love Hanitra,

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