Autumnal

Yesterday has passed, today I shall rise and dream, let mourning stars fade. Some flowers may wilt, Yet fragrance remains when skies- bleed cantaloupe hope. Ruby crowned kinglets, croon and rest on bleak brown shrubs, as rays of autumn- swiftly glide amongst, peridot promises wrapped in crisp memories. But when ink comes as wind-swept secrets tumbling in, russet streaks of sun, I'll stretch honey dipped fingers, to sketch your saffron, name across twilight. Maybe dance of leaves, and flurry hues would define, unseen tomorrows. As weightless amber, carries warm crimson kisses, Sealed in spiced silence. So when rosy moon returns amidst silver clouds sing sweet songs of love. You and I, we are- poetry woven in red, beneath gloaming gold, painting crystal clear wishes.

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Unseeking Seeker

Date: 10/26/2023 3:14:00 PM

A brilliant Choka! You did this in one breath, it seems!

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 10/5/2023 10:55:00 AM

-"I'll stretch honey dipped fingers, to sketch your saffron, name across twilight" ... beautifully described - A wonderful poem, Ink ... congratulations on your win :) - hugs

Ink Empress
Date: 10/7/2023 8:39:00 AM

Awwn thank you so muchhhh

Sotto Poet

Date: 10/5/2023 10:12:00 AM

Dear Ink, congratulations on your win in my contest. This exquisite piece of poetry is a true gem overflowing with an abundance of vivid and captivating imagery. Your mastery of diction is evident in the flawless composition of this well-crafted poem. Within its verses, you skillfully portray the transitions with such intricate precision, and eloquence that one cannot help but marvel at your artistry.

Ink Empress
Date: 10/7/2023 8:39:00 AM

Thank you so much for not just placing my poem but also for your supportive and kind comment about my poem truly im grateful

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 10/5/2023 8:27:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. Your "Autumnal" is a beautiful Choka write. I really enjoyed it. Have a blessed day writing away....................

Ink Empress
Date: 10/5/2023 9:02:00 AM

Thank u kindly

Joanna Daniel

Date: 10/3/2023 6:30:00 PM

This flows so wonderfully, a superb choka, Ink..."peridot promises wrapped in crisp memories", "As weightless amber, carries warm crimson kisses, Sealed in spiced silence" - wow! So many touching lines... Amazing work, IE:)

Ink Empress
Date: 10/5/2023 9:02:00 AM

Awwn thank you beautiful joanna i am ever so grateful for your generous and sincere support thank u so very much truly

Suzanne Delaney

Date: 10/3/2023 3:10:00 PM

Blowing my mind here with these fabulous fall descriptions. I so want to write another Autumn poem for this year but I just lost dear little dog and inspiration is at a low ebb. Perhaps if I really try- something will come.Autumn kisses….SuZ

Suzanne Delaney
Date: 10/9/2023 12:45:00 PM

Thanks Dear Empress: He did love the meadow and I walk down there to remember him.Thanks for your thoughtful reply. Hugs, SuZ

Ink Empress
Date: 10/5/2023 9:02:00 AM

Im so sorry for your loss, must be painful, maybe you can write about how much you miss your little dog as winter arrives and how changing colors somehow remind you of your little dog, thank u for the autumn kisses, and i appreciate ur support truly always

Paige Hind

Date: 10/3/2023 2:55:00 PM

Gorgeous work!

Ink Empress
Date: 10/5/2023 9:00:00 AM

Thank u beautiful

Karen Croft

Date: 10/3/2023 1:11:00 PM

Lovely! I wish I could write as well as you, your words flow so easily. Thanks for your comment!

Ink Empress
Date: 10/5/2023 9:00:00 AM

No problem it was my pleasure and thank u too

Anitha Jayasankar

Date: 10/1/2023 11:45:00 PM

Aw... what a magical sprinkle of romantic write for your beloved, dear sweet ink empress... I was hold spellbound as I read it from the beginning to the end. "when skies bleed cantaloupe hope".. " peridot promises wrapped in crisp memories "... and " warm crimson kisses sealed in spiced silence "... you are such a gifted writer who never fails to captivate your readers with your talented ink..Sure a top winner..Hugs... ~ Ani

Ink Empress
Date: 10/2/2023 7:47:00 AM

Thank you kind soul for your comment, truly grateful, that you felt the emotions within this write. And you are very talented and kind

Debjani Mitra

Date: 10/1/2023 10:22:00 PM

Aha...what a smooth stream of words, made the reader drift through simply exotic ..

Ink Empress
Date: 10/2/2023 7:46:00 AM

Thank you so much kind soul im forever grateful for your generous and sincere support

Eve Roper

Date: 10/1/2023 9:39:00 PM

A canvas full of color. A still-life of days and what it carries with it. Enjoyed reading this well done Choka.

Ink Empress
Date: 10/2/2023 7:39:00 AM

Thank you so much means alot coming from a talented poetess like you. Grateful always

Anisha Dutta

Date: 10/1/2023 8:26:00 PM

May be dance of leaves and flurry hues would define unseen tomorrows….. Outstanding ! Sure , the poem will win.

Ink Empress
Date: 10/2/2023 7:33:00 AM

Thank you so much for your visit and for your kindness beautiful soul. Truly grateful

Sara Kendrick

Date: 10/1/2023 3:11:00 PM

Way to go for a contest, IE. Reads like a good contender to me. Thanks for sharing it with us and for dropping by my page. Sara

Ink Empress
Date: 10/2/2023 7:22:00 AM

Thank you so much Sara, yes was for a contest, and i appreciate you dropping by my page too.

Jay Narain

Date: 10/1/2023 10:06:00 AM

Well penned poem. Wow.

Ink Empress
Date: 10/2/2023 7:17:00 AM

Thank you so very much

Besma Riabi Dziri

Date: 10/1/2023 10:04:00 AM

"We are poetry woven in red" fashioning an amazing tapestry of the reigning season.. So splendid and majestic what your ink is spilling! So profound and meticulous is your display of autumnal landscape and atmosphere! So impressed by the type of poetry unfamiliar to me but adeptly approached by you dear Empress! Always a treat to read you! God bless you. My most sincere salutations.

Ink Empress
Date: 10/2/2023 7:16:00 AM

So good to hear from you Dear kind Besma, thank you so much for your feedback and for understanding my poem and feeling my words, grateful for your poetic presence

Heidi Sands

Date: 10/1/2023 7:51:00 AM

Wow. This is beautiful and I love the ending too. You are a good writer :)

Ink Empress
Date: 10/2/2023 7:12:00 AM

Thats so kind of you to say, thank you so much

John Lawless

Date: 10/1/2023 6:13:00 AM

"I'll stretch honey dipped fingers, to sketch your saffron name across twilight'...WOW.....I think I just saw Autumn blush.....beautifully done Ink

Ink Empress
Date: 10/2/2023 7:09:00 AM

Thank you so much, for not just reading but feeling my words. Truly grateful. Always

The Aura Rhymes

Date: 10/1/2023 5:21:00 AM

Always a great write

Ink Empress
Date: 10/2/2023 7:08:00 AM

Thank you so much

Valsa George

Date: 10/1/2023 5:15:00 AM

You make me spell bound each time I read you. All that is beautiful won't stay, yet all is not lost."Some flowers may wilt, Yet fragrance remains when skies- bleed cantaloupe hope." Much remains to be craved for and there is fragrance still lingering in the air. So there is always scope for dreaming fresh dreams. How beautifully you have set the stage for the blooming of an ardent love.This poem has made my heart leap in a kind of ecstasy..... don't know why, may be at the thought of 'dancing leaves defining unseen tomorrows'. Sweet.... very sweet! My comment is a series of scattered thoughts. Wonder if I make any sense.

Ink Empress
Date: 10/2/2023 7:07:00 AM

Awwn this means do much coming from a talented poetess like you truly, thank you so very much for your sincere and heartfelt thoughts on my poem as always. I alwYs smile when i read your comments cus they are so uplifting and soulful! Grateful for your poetic presence.

Tom Woody

Date: 10/1/2023 5:12:00 AM

"You and I, we are poetry woven in red". Lucky the fellow for whom this is true. Awesome poetry my friend

Ink Empress
Date: 10/2/2023 6:51:00 AM

Thank you so much always .” Lucky fellow” made me laugh hah

Vijay Pandit

Date: 10/1/2023 5:09:00 AM

WOW! You have woven beautiful tapestries of autumn adorned in verses of love, my friend. A perfect blend of intellect and creativity. Maybe dance of leaves, and flurry hues would define, unseen tomorrows. As weightless amber, carries warm crimson kisses, Sealed in spiced silence. So when rosy moon returns amidst silver clouds sing sweet songs of love--simply beautiful! A definite FAVE!

Ink Empress
Date: 10/2/2023 6:43:00 AM

Your response truly made me so happy! Thank you so much for a very heartfelt and supportive comment, u am so glad you felt emotions too in this poem, means alot and appreciate your fave too. Truly

Beryl Edmonds

Date: 10/1/2023 3:12:00 AM

A beautiful autumnal Choka poem Ink, wonderful lines, every one… Belle

Ink Empress
Date: 10/2/2023 6:39:00 AM

Thank you kindly, always for your generous and sincere support. Grateful always

Silent One

Date: 10/1/2023 2:39:00 AM

I see you have worked out how to use the italic option.. Now you are really showing your poetic talent here with a choka.. you certainly have not found the syllable limitations difficult and have written a poem full of vivid imagery... So many great lines here like sing sweet songs of love and sealed in spice silence... and those crimson kisses sound delightful... good luck in the contest.

Ink Empress
Date: 10/2/2023 6:37:00 AM

Wht a beautiful comment silent one, yes i learned how to use fonts lol haha was hard, i still need to learn how to upload pics. Or maybe its good that i dont know. Chokas are easy. No big deal. But im glad u think this is good thank u so much

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 10/1/2023 1:25:00 AM

I have written poems about Autumn and have a new one for tomorrow, hopefully. Your poem is fantastic. I dread posting mine. So full of emotions and imagery. Truly a poetic fav.

Ink Empress
Date: 10/2/2023 6:32:00 AM

Thank you so much Victor, i cant wait to read yours, i love autumnal poems. Grateful for your feedback

Lioness Onpaper

Date: 10/1/2023 12:16:00 AM

This chokaaaaa mmmmmm!!! Yesterday has passed,today I shall rise and dream,. My brain like this too .. Some flowers may wilt,Yet fragrance remains.. ooo sooo true!! I'll stretch honey dipped fingers, to sketch your saffron, name across twilight… oh my!! Yes please !! You and I, we are poetry woven in red, beneath gloaming gold,.. mmm u making me blush papi aeeeee!!! Gorgeous warm gold fall piece!!

Ink Empress
Date: 10/2/2023 6:25:00 AM

HahHa i can hear you saying all this! Crazy lolol thank u so much for reading and for leaving your thoughtful feedback. Grateful always