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I brushed water colors with thoughts of Adam's Eve and the fallen one who was disguised to deceive this naked nymph, who strikes a nubile pose offering a ripened apple and a crimson rose Both face and body, painted innocently pure her femininity was unquestionably demure but with forbidden fruit bitten, it was all lost From Eden's paradise she and Adam were tossed. Uprooted as a tree, she forfeited divine favor The evil reptile's lie succeeded to enslave her Woe to the male offspring she was created to bear One killed by the hand of the other, his plight forswear To them, closed forever was the garden's gate The finality of death then became mankind's fate A wrong path was chosen when she'd been warned gave way to mortality that all of us have mourned

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Date: 2/10/2024 2:42:00 AM
excellent ink Lin, I'm not usually one to read religious themed poems but this is so beautifully penned and sneds out a powerful message:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 2/10/2024 8:25:00 AM
I'm aware, Jan, which makes your comments on this one even more special to me. Thanks, chick.
Date: 2/9/2024 4:59:00 PM
Dearest Lin, This is a hauntingly beautiful exploration of the timeless tale of Adam and Eve. Through delicate strokes of watercolor words, you put together the complexities of temptation, innocence, and consequence with profound elegance. The ripened apple and the crimson rose evokes a sense of both allure and foreboding, mirroring the duality of human nature and the choices we face. A wonderful poem, Lin. - Blessings, Daniel
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Date: 2/10/2024 8:25:00 AM
How very kind are your comments, Daniel. I think I just might have to paint my vision for this one... of course featuring the crimson rose and an apple. Your thoughts always are delightful to read. Thank you ever so much.
Date: 2/9/2024 3:51:00 PM
A marvellous write, Lin, which I believe depicts the events that led to the first known use of that oft used expression… “That bloody woman!”. Seriously though, I usually steer clear of religious ‘stuff’ but this drew me in and also taught me a little. Great!
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Date: 2/10/2024 8:23:00 AM
Yeah, she was too easily influenced, but 'That bloody man' didn't have to take a bite either. LOL Thanks for reading this one, Terry. I never preach religion, but this drawing was screaming at me to pick up my pen.
Date: 2/9/2024 2:04:00 PM
a brilliant creation, Lin! I loved how the lines flowed as you told the familiar story that gave way to our own mortality. With all sincerity, I thought your poem was a masterpiece. Have to fave it for sure! have a great evening and weekend ahead! hugs, Sara
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Lin Lane
Date: 2/10/2024 8:21:00 AM
Good morning, Sara and thank you so very much for your gracious compliments as well as favoring it. Your comments are always a source of encouragement to me. Hugs.

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