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***Inspired by the earnest hope that hunger all over the world will be solve soon...

AND I'M HUNGRY FOR YOU Three days passed, Billy again is sitting relax in his favorite place. Smile flower from his face as he watch closely a single file of shadows on the wall. He is envious that these ants are more systematic and resourceful in gathering their bread and butter. my need, my want, my feelings of desire arise by the smell of foods Billy's hollow excited eyes accompanied by spiderlike hands cram to spoon the fallen scattered crumbs of rice and biscuits from a passer by on the rough dirty floor. Today, I desire an eat all you can meal treat "all" including filth He is done eating all crumbs but still a lion growls inside his stomach, he ran like a train to ask her mama for milk but how can he suck-- ... when fertile breasts two weeks now is suffering drought. parasitical technically edible---- I am eating you _____________________________________________________________ 8:41 pm; July 27, 2015

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Kp Nunez

Date: 8/23/2015 10:14:00 AM

Back to congratulate you on this thoughtful winning piece, Olive. hugs!

Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/21/2015 9:27:00 AM

Congrats on your winning work that expresses a present problem that needs to be addresses..Sara

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 8/21/2015 2:02:00 AM

Congrats on another wonderful win Olive with this amazing haibun!

Skat A

Date: 8/20/2015 7:28:00 PM

Olive, Congrats on your HM win. SKAT

Jan Allison

Date: 8/20/2015 5:22:00 PM

Such a powerful write Olive so glad I have the chance to read it:-) hugs Jan xx 7

Scott Thirtyseven

Date: 8/18/2015 7:16:00 AM

Hello Olive, I really enjoyed the opening prose on this haibun. But unfortunately I felt the middle haiku was a little flat. Also I was not able to see the pictures that you have attached to this piece. So what I am saying is, thank you for entering my competition, but on this occasion your poem will not be making the top 20. I was lucky to receive a lot of very strong poems in this competition. I will however give this poem a Honourable mention, so that others will be able to follow the link.

Paul Callus

Date: 8/3/2015 3:58:00 PM

This is an important topic that you deal with Olive_eloi. ~ There are those who have in abundance and also waste, while others suffer hunger, malnutrition, followed by death. An imbalance of resources that needs to be tackled by people in power. ~ Haibun is a new form to me; you tempt me to try it:) Hugs // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 11/16/2015 2:02:00 AM

weeee, i like it when I tempt anyone to try some new forms..=`)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/1/2015 1:08:00 PM

very sad statistics that you portrayed through one child's sad thoughts in your poem, Olive. Yes, when the mother too is not even able to nurse her own child, that is tragic. It's awful to think this is happening every three seconds. MY!!!

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 9/19/2015 5:24:00 AM

Awful indeed Andie.. :( thanks much for tge comment..

Eric Boddie

Date: 7/30/2015 2:54:00 PM

who will feed the hungry....who will shelter the homeless....who will Love the hopeless....who will rescue the lost....well through God, the answer is simple...it has to be me because if I see a problem, I should take the initiative to fix it....great post olive....educate the world of the problems we face daily.....

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 8/21/2015 3:12:00 AM

I think we all know the problems of the world jusg that we sometimes forget how to participate in somehow alleviating them...

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 7/30/2015 5:41:00 AM

- Dear Olive, a topic that really pains - You have "an important headline and truth" - A wonderful poems and messages !!! - A clear 7! - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 8/6/2015 9:28:00 AM

Thank you so much Anne Lise... =') im trying to venture to some other themes...

Nette Onclaud

Date: 7/29/2015 1:26:00 PM

reality bites and you have mirrored the dire need of many deprived children..so beautiful and disturbing, eloi.. ok for august meet, yeahh!..huggs

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 8/4/2015 1:31:00 AM

weeee thanks much Nette.. after I watched this documentary I immediately write this one.. =') hugs back! yes see yah soon!

Mohammad Ahmed

Date: 7/29/2015 6:47:00 AM

Incredible !! lots of thing to learn from this ...

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 7/31/2015 3:07:00 AM

Thanks much mohammed... =') I learned to when I made this

Harry Horsman

Date: 7/29/2015 5:53:00 AM

wow, i just had to read this..I love this particular form of poetry,,and you truly get your message home here...a wonderful poem Olive, so glad i've seen this,,,made my day.

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 7/31/2015 7:47:00 AM

Harry , when I read yours that's the time I am challenged to make my own version.. :D! :P thanks for the inspiration.. =')

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 7/30/2015 5:41:00 AM

I was watching a documentary about hunger the last time and a thought from Mother Teresa... I brought this to your attention in the hope that you could help me with the haiku but since our schedules both different I tried it on my own.. Haiku is one of the poetry form am not so sure with if am doing ok .. :D! :P hugs!

James Fraser

Date: 7/28/2015 1:20:00 PM

Hey Olive, thank you for bringing this Form to my attention. We could do a collab in the near future. I wonder will hunger be eradicated on this wonderful planet, to be honest, I really don't think so for the worlds population is increasing so fast, and people are living longer. Time will tell, loved this piece/form~~ hugs//always//James xx

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 7/30/2015 5:37:00 AM

Yes the population keeps growing... I don't like to lose hope with regards to finding a solution for this problem... However, I hope that by us helping one way or another in our own little way, we can decrease the occurrence of such.. Partly, I can blame this to "parents" who continuously produce but they don't have the enough "capacity" to keep their children well-fed...

Njeri Hunjeri

Date: 7/27/2015 2:38:00 PM

Sad truth of world hunger. While some waste food daily, some go for days and weeks with nothing. I also pray for the time world hunger would b eliminated or atleast rare

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 7/28/2015 10:18:00 AM

Yes Njeri this one of the reasons why I made this.. lately, I am in want to change the themes of what I write.. =") thanks much for a thoughtful drop by..

Sara Kendrick

Date: 7/27/2015 11:47:00 AM

Interesting work for the contest..Reads like winning material..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 7/28/2015 10:16:00 AM

Hi Sara, thanks much for this visit.. =')! Glad you like it.. :D

Kp Nunez

Date: 7/27/2015 11:08:00 AM

A disturbing piece, it makes the reader uncomfortable and in that aspect, your inspiration succeeded in delivering the message. We are not simply readers. We are called upon to think and act on what we know. Awesome write Olive! hugs

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 7/28/2015 10:16:00 AM

Kim, this one of the reasons why I like writing more than speaking.. :D! HEre I can express as much as I can.. creating awareness and arousing a challenge, inspirations and thoughts to anyone who passes and read my poems is what I like.. =')

Arthur Vaso

Date: 7/27/2015 10:35:00 AM

It pains me whenever I think of this topic , if only we thought more of the children, what a better world it would be for everyone! Great write!

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 7/28/2015 10:13:00 AM

It pains me too and this am more challenge that if ever I become a mother I shall not let my children be like this.. ! thanks much buddy Art! :D

Frederic Parker

Date: 7/27/2015 9:17:00 AM

Darkness follows the child that lives in the squaller of humanity..my first though after reading your poignant poem

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 7/27/2015 11:31:00 AM

Frederic, thank you so much.. I don't want to end this poem in a death way.. Hence, I just settled for the hunger and hunger and hunger.. :(!!