Alone

As I walked I thought on her face, The colour of her hair, tone of her voice, I wondered where she was now but no; That is the path to despair and anguish, The world has moved on, I am alone. As I sat in the café I thought on her face, The colour of her eyes, shape of her mouth, I wondered where she was now but no; Pain and heart ache lie there, I do not pursue the thought, I am alone. As I lay in my bed I thought on her face, The colour of her lips, glow of her cheek, I wondered where she was now but no; There my dreams will drown in tears, Darkness shrouds me, I am alone.

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/8/2015 2:27:00 PM

This one really conveys loneliness so well. I like the repeating lines I am alone. Very nicely done!

Shane Cooper
Date: 1/8/2015 2:32:00 PM

Thank you Andrea, I am still trying to match up to my first poem that i posted. love Shane xxx

Seren Roberts

Date: 1/6/2015 11:18:00 AM

Hi Shane your poem on Loneliness is excellent, you can read mine with the title Loneliness if you wish, it is poem of the week. Keep up the good work.......Seren

Shane Cooper
Date: 1/6/2015 4:15:00 PM

Thanks Seren for the kind words and encouragement. i have read your poem and commented. it is very good. Congrats on Poem of the week! Shane

Jan Allison

Date: 1/6/2015 6:45:00 AM

You portrayed loneliness so well Shane I love the impact of the repeated line - I can relate this one where all we have left is our dreams:-( Hugs Jan xx

Jan Allison
Date: 1/6/2015 10:48:00 AM

I love listening to music and find some songs so inspirational my Scintillating Snowflakes was written at a lives blues event - I needed something to take my mind from the depressing songs lol:-) Hugs Jan xx

Shane Cooper
Date: 1/6/2015 7:15:00 AM

Thanks Jan I had been listening to some readings of Pablo Neruda and after I listened to "tonight I can write the sadest lines" I had to write something glad you liked it.

Dorian Petersen Potter

Date: 1/6/2015 6:26:00 AM

Very nice pen Shane! I enjoyed reading your poem. A 7 from me! Thank you for sharing dear friend.Wish you a happy new year 2015! Have a very lovely day :) Love and hugs! xxx D.

Shane Cooper
Date: 1/6/2015 7:18:00 AM

Thank you Dorian, Pablo Neruda was my muse tonight. God what poetry he wrote!! Love Shane xxx