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Do not look to me with questioning eyes For i do not possess the answers you seek i cannot taste the bitter sweetness on your tongue, or smell the withered flowers along your path My heart beats with less rythm than your blues i am unable to stumble through your dark corridors, for you are poet undiscovered Your answers are hidden deep within an apathetic pen For you hide behind a painted closed window Pushing too little arriving late Not aware of your own relevance Solitarily, feeling sorry for yourself When instead, pity could be your party Yes it is true, the world celebrates sad clowns But you do not let laughter mix with your grey sky tears i myself, see images of you poured out on limitless pages Rearranged Sculpted Until your words have substance Becoming living and breathing beings I wish you to reveal to us your cherished children Birth them to a forgiving unforgiven world Risk the grasping hands of rejection True courage will reveal your annoited pen Without risk you cannot will not bleed in rainbowed splendor Instead, days will become years Yesterday will slide into tomorrow All the while the world would be less A shadow of what it could have been In a place of unawareness Oblivious to its own lacking Bathed in deprivation All because Of a missing Unexpressed Silent Unexplored voice! Or maybe Just maybe One letter A tiny little letter will grow into a word Several strung together a stanza Several stanzas a poem An honest to goodnes poem Then we will all be witnesses To the emergence The screaming or quiet entrance The proverbial birth of a singular voice of a wide eyed dreamer Then you will feel that collective sigh as other broken dreamers applaud you For on that day If only you possess the courage all will know That you truly are and always have been a Poet! For Tyshawn Knight's "Words of Wisdom" contest Re edited version.

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Date: 6/16/2015 12:33:00 AM
RICHARD, :-) Congratulations with your wonderful win! *SKAT*
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Date: 6/10/2015 11:23:00 AM
Oh I love this one! Much of it describes how I felt when I went public with my poetry and stepped onto a stage for the first time facing a roomful of poets.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/10/2015 4:56:00 PM
Thanks Monterey, it is indeed a humbling experience.
Date: 6/8/2015 6:59:00 PM
very wise write Rick hugs
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/8/2015 7:45:00 PM
Thanks again Shadow. Hugs Rick.
Date: 6/7/2015 6:36:00 PM
Outstanding !!! A favourite !
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/7/2015 7:22:00 PM
Thanks for reading both Charmaine.
Date: 6/4/2015 11:39:00 AM
Richard, well I like this version of your poem, this is what flowed from your pen and to me that is what makes it so beautiful. I have been studying the poets of the past and many wrote completely in lower case and some with no punctuation, take for example EE Cummings and no one can dispute his awesome skill , this is just my opinion , it is your poem or is it when edited to suit someone else idea of what it should be
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/4/2015 9:25:00 PM
Thanks, the more I contemplate the more I agree with you. I'm pleased you read both versions.
Date: 6/3/2015 12:34:00 AM
words of wisdom this was, such an inspirational right. Enjoyed :), good luck in the contest ~Luv S.K.A.T.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/3/2015 8:29:00 PM
Thanks S.K.A.T.
Date: 6/2/2015 2:36:00 PM
The hardest part is taking that first step, taking a risk....very sound advice
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/3/2015 12:21:00 AM
Thanks Tim.
Date: 6/2/2015 10:25:00 AM
Richard, advice coming from you always merits to be taken seriously. I see a new poet as a chick emerging from its egg, ready to develop into something special. #7 // paul
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/3/2015 12:22:00 AM
I like your analogy Paul.
Date: 6/2/2015 2:47:00 AM
Well, I'll take that as an advice :p, you really brought such a motivated words Rick, glad to visit your page today and read this thoughtful piece, my impression never change upon your words, they are always stunning :) have a great day there, hug, yanny
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/2/2015 6:50:00 AM
Thanks dear Yanny.;0)
Date: 6/1/2015 5:09:00 PM
thank you but could not read to the end my attention span is short only for me and the animals we share a few crokettes but I watch children at play and even take a risk at double hotch or scotch do i know what i am talking about and not playing domino I do not visit social club but from the deep of my heart come to visit some time
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/2/2015 1:12:00 AM
Thanks follow for this most intriguing comment.
Date: 6/1/2015 3:56:00 PM
wow, what deep advice for some poet, whoever it may be, needing to break that shell that they are keeping around themselves. You are amazing when you write like this.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/2/2015 1:13:00 AM
Thanks Andrea.;0)
Date: 6/1/2015 9:25:00 AM
Like your poem. Quite inspiring.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/2/2015 1:13:00 AM
Thanks Marjorie.
Date: 6/1/2015 9:11:00 AM
Your words of wisdom, certainly take one's breath away,,,truly this is so inspiring,,,so poignant
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/1/2015 9:16:00 AM
Thankyou kind friend, I appreciate the visit.
Date: 6/1/2015 9:10:00 AM
Richard, I love how your poem is ever growing and evolving, this is what a true poet does, some poets of old wrote their masterpieces over the course of their life, changing them frequently until they felt them perfect, a big 7 from me, and thanks so much for visiting my poem shameonyou, it is a good feeling to see that particular write selected as POTD
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/1/2015 9:15:00 AM
They made an excellent choice, I'm proud of you.
Date: 5/31/2015 7:21:00 PM
If you change this poem one more time, I swear I am gonna think I wrote it!!!!! I mean who writes a poem that is always changing? I have to say, it does get better and better!!!!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/31/2015 8:19:00 PM
You are an inspiration my friend. I think I am finally done!
Date: 5/31/2015 1:29:00 PM
i really enjoyed and loved ur words of wisdom!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/1/2015 8:39:00 AM
Thanks Nadia.;0)
Date: 5/31/2015 10:55:00 AM
Love it. Using writing as an allegory for how to live life itself.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/31/2015 12:36:00 PM
Thanks Duke!
Date: 5/31/2015 10:50:00 AM
A very inspiring piece. You really are a good poet, Rick. :)
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/31/2015 12:37:00 PM
Thanks Zhaira. Hugs Rick.
Date: 5/31/2015 9:48:00 AM
Yes, even better, Richard. I believe you meant "shadow" on verse 2...? I hope it's fine to say it here, just a typo. Thank you for informing me about the additions. Blessings for the contest! Kim
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/31/2015 12:39:00 PM
Thanks I appreciate you letting me know.
Date: 5/31/2015 5:24:00 AM
a deeply insightful read that speaks volumes about your view on life. rich.. a poet you really are// huggs
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/31/2015 8:01:00 AM
Thanks Nette, some days I wonder. Hugs back to you.
Date: 5/30/2015 10:44:00 PM
Beautiful and kind thoughts there, Richard. You are a very perceptive poet. You write best on human nature. May you continue to write for a long time. We benefit from your nuggets of wisdom. Kim
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/31/2015 8:03:00 AM
You are kind. Have another look I have made a number of changes.
Date: 5/30/2015 8:41:00 PM
Richard, a wonderful write, 7 a lot of times my poems are inspired by one word that grows
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/31/2015 8:05:00 AM
For me it is usually a single line that pops into my headband I let it lead me where it may.
Date: 5/30/2015 7:19:00 PM
Now I wish I had the first version to compare the 2 endings! Nicely done!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/31/2015 8:06:00 AM
Thanks Arthur for coming back. Now it is different again, I hope I havn't over cooked it.
Date: 5/30/2015 6:01:00 PM
If I say a masterpiece I would be under rating this one! Loved it!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/30/2015 6:06:00 PM
Thanks Arthur.;0)
Date: 5/30/2015 5:10:00 PM
All sound advice Rick, I must admit my pen has been more stationery of late and my pages very limited, but writes like this do inspire. I'm sure not only me. If for contest this will do very well. Take care, Richard
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/30/2015 6:29:00 PM
Richard! So great to have you visit. Yes it is for the contest, she asked for verse so I suspect this will not do well. in the end I have another poem so I will be satisfied either way.
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