Above a Stream

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Effloescent irises yellow and blue Barely sway against the wind whisper Above a stream where old wishes come true In her dream he could never resist her Left with a fragile hope A dreadful way to cope They have plans to elope Note says at six For wedded bliss Sealed with a kiss In her bag something borrowed, something new Nerves shattered waiting for him to kiss her She startled as a voice behind her spoke Let us do this May 27, 2018 Puzzle of My Rhyme Contest by Broken Wings Seventh Place Rhyme - ABAB CCC DDD ABCD Syllable Line Count by howmanysyllables.com - 10, 10, 10, 10, 6, 6, 6, 4, 4, 4, 10, 10, 10, 4

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/24/2018 3:17:00 PM

Oh I just love this one and the PERFECT ending on it, Susan. BIG congrats for your win.

Susan Gentry
Date: 6/24/2018 10:30:00 PM

Thank you! Appreciate this. :)

Constance La France

Date: 6/24/2018 7:22:00 AM

Susan, congratulations on your win in my contest with this wonderful write, well done and I like your image too ~

Susan Gentry
Date: 6/24/2018 10:29:00 PM

Thank you! I am honored to be on your winners list. This was a challenging and fun contest to do. Thsnk you for sponsoring it and for ll you do. :)

Heidi Sands

Date: 6/23/2018 4:48:00 PM

Excellent. Congratulations for your win Susan :)

Susan Gentry
Date: 6/23/2018 8:00:00 PM

Thank you, Heidi!

Line Gauthier

Date: 6/23/2018 2:32:00 PM

A lovely poem. Congrats, Susan.

Susan Gentry
Date: 6/23/2018 7:59:00 PM

Thank you, Line.

Gershon Wolf

Date: 6/5/2018 10:44:00 AM

Revisiting for a moment: Your 4th line -- Above a stream where old wishes come true -- is deeply moving. I could linger there forever. Thanks for the thought! :) gw

Susan Gentry
Date: 6/6/2018 12:44:00 AM

Thanks so much! :)

Gershon Wolf

Date: 5/29/2018 8:21:00 PM

Wonderful write for this contest, Susan, one that works well outside the contest as well! :) gw

Susan Gentry
Date: 5/30/2018 12:44:00 AM

Why, thank you! :)