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Abandoned Dreams

Knotted in the torsion of a tempest’s mood - the barrage drains the sun and overwhelms the dusk ire’s flash stabs the night. Susan Ashley April 6, 2019 ~ Second Place ~ Contest: Favorite Poem From Last Week (March31 - April 6, 2019) Contest: Lu Loo ~ Third Place ~ Contest: April 2019 Premier (3 Line Max) Sponsor: Brian Strand

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Brian Sambourne

Date: 5/7/2022 9:09:00 AM

Greetings Susan, Another winner in so many ways. Your final line that (metaphorically) conveys anger as a dagger is truly inspired writing. Sincerest regards, Brian

Susan Ashley
Date: 5/8/2022 9:05:00 AM

Dear Brian, thank you for sharing in the dark mood and emotions of this poem. Your wonderful comments are uplifting, my friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Eve Roper

Date: 4/18/2019 10:08:00 PM

Congratulations on your wonderful win in Laura's contest. Have a great Easter. Hugs Eve ~`*

Susan Ashley
Date: 4/19/2019 8:15:00 PM

Thank you for your lovely comments and your gracious visit, Eve. It is such a pleasure to hear from you. Your kind congrats are most appreciated. Warmest wishes for a happy Easter.. ~Susan

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 4/17/2019 6:40:00 PM

You have made the fierce power of Earth's elements roar Susan. Awesome! Congratulations on your second placement with this imaginative free verse! xxoo

Susan Ashley
Date: 4/19/2019 8:14:00 PM

It's always so wonderful to hear from you, Connie. Thank you for your heartwarming comments and kind congrats. You never fail to inspire me, my friend! Warmest wishes for a Happy Easter .. ~Susan

Arturo Michael

Date: 4/15/2019 8:37:00 AM

Knotted,Drained Overwhelms...Ire stabs...Feel tired already...powerful words...powerful write...All the best Susan...

Susan Ashley
Date: 4/15/2019 5:31:00 PM

Yes, you don’t need much bc you’re so naturally sweet already :))

Arturo Michael
Date: 4/15/2019 5:08:00 PM

Just a teaspoon of sugar...and I'm good to go...

Susan Ashley
Date: 4/15/2019 4:20:00 PM

I know, it’s enough to wear you out, isn’t it? Thank you for your wonderful comments and gracious visit, mon ami. You bring smiles always. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Sandra Haight

Date: 4/11/2019 8:47:00 AM

What a vision...earthly as well as metaphorically...you paint with your well-chosen words, Susan. Very powerful. Congratulations on your podium win. Hugs, Sandra

Susan Ashley
Date: 4/12/2019 3:40:00 PM

Thank you, Sandra, for your precious comments and kind congrats. I truly appreciate your thoughts on seeing both sides of my poem. Warmest wishes always, my friend.. ~Susan

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 4/10/2019 11:11:00 PM

Congratulations my friend! You can "do something in 3 lines and/or 3 words that most cannot." Bravo my friend!

Susan Ashley
Date: 4/11/2019 8:31:00 AM

It's always so wonderful to hear from you, Caren. Thank you for your heartwarming comments and kind congrats. You never fail to bring me smiles, my friend! Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Robertina B.

Date: 4/10/2019 5:08:00 AM

A belated congratulations on your win, dear Susan!! An Exquisite free verse.. Penned so beautifully.. Your gifted talent continues to shine, my friend.. Have a blessed dsy!

Susan Ashley
Date: 4/10/2019 7:33:00 PM

I am uplifted by the loveliness of your generous comments and by your gracious visit, my dear Robertina. Your kind congrats warms my heart and is most appreciated. Warmest wishes to you always, my inspiring friend.. ~Susan

Xuefeng Pan

Date: 4/10/2019 12:21:00 AM

a Profound expression of the fierce imagery Congratulations on your win

Susan Ashley
Date: 4/10/2019 7:31:00 PM

Your awesome comments are a pleasure to receive, Xuefeng. Thank you for your heartwarming words and for your kind congrats. Your gracious visit is most appreciated. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Eve Roper

Date: 4/9/2019 2:31:00 PM

Susan , congratulations on this very well done free verse.

Susan Ashley
Date: 4/9/2019 3:52:00 PM

Thank you for your wonderful comments and your gracious visit, Eve. It is such a pleasure to hear from you. Your kind congrats are most appreciated. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Winged Warrior

Date: 4/9/2019 8:32:00 AM

Hey sissy!...great stuff as per usual...congrats on the win my sibaling...happy endings...^**^ bro bro...{*J*}

Susan Ashley
Date: 4/9/2019 3:54:00 PM

Hey bro bro, it's always so wonderful to hear from you. Thank you for your awesome comments and kindhearted congrats. You never fail to bring me smiles, my sibaling! Warmest wishes and happy endings all around.. Your sane sissy, Illum <3

Carole Duet

Date: 4/9/2019 12:04:00 AM

This is really a wonderful poem, Susan. Congrats on your placement in the contest. :D

Susan Ashley
Date: 4/9/2019 3:50:00 PM

Thank you for your uplifting comments and your gracious visit, Carole. It is such a pleasure to hear from you. Your kind congrats are most appreciated. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Agnes Krampe

Date: 4/8/2019 6:56:00 PM

Congrats on your win, Susan

Susan Ashley
Date: 4/9/2019 3:49:00 PM

Thank you for your kind congrats, Agnes.. and many congrats to you for your recently published poems. Your work is wondrous! Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Gershon Wolf

Date: 4/8/2019 4:59:00 PM

Welcome back! … with such a vivid, winning three-line entry. The light emanating from your poem eclipses that of the mighty sun! :) gw

Susan Ashley
Date: 4/9/2019 3:47:00 PM

It's good to be back and I appreciate your warm welcome, my dear friend, Gershon. Thank you for your shining comments, the light emanating from your kind words fills me with sunny delight.. (that is.. golden light and happiness.. not the OJ.. lol!) Warmest wishes my wonderful friend.. ~Susan

Ralph Sergi

Date: 4/8/2019 3:51:00 PM

You epitomized an overwhelming mood in just 3 lines. Congratulations! I PREDICT A IN!

Susan Ashley
Date: 4/9/2019 3:43:00 PM

Your uplifting and encouraging comments are such a delight to receive, Ralph. Thank you for your kindness and for your wonderful prediction. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Ralph Sergi
Date: 4/8/2019 3:52:00 PM

I PREDICT A WIN!

Nette Onclaud

Date: 4/8/2019 3:15:00 PM

ohh, from vivid to stark images, this piece rouses the senses, susan... remarkable!..huggs

Susan Ashley
Date: 4/9/2019 3:41:00 PM

Your lovely comments are such a delight to receive, Nette. Thank you for shining your light of kindness on my poetry page. Warmest wishes, my inspiring friend.. ~Susan

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/7/2019 3:08:00 PM

wow, very elegant words. I bet this will make the winners' list!!

Susan Ashley
Date: 4/7/2019 3:40:00 PM

Let’s hope the judge agrees with you, Andrea :)) Thank you for your uplifting comments and the pleasure of your visit. Warmest wishes always, my friend.. ~Susan

Joanna Daniel

Date: 4/7/2019 10:31:00 AM

Poetry at its best, Susan:)

Susan Ashley
Date: 4/7/2019 3:05:00 PM

Thank you for your uplifting comments and your gracious visit , Jo. It is such a pleasure to hear from you. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Robert Lindley

Date: 4/7/2019 7:45:00 AM

True poetry my dear friend. I am so very and most delightfully pleased to see you have returned. So much power and depths in such few verses. A fav... God bless..

Susan Ashley
Date: 4/7/2019 7:54:00 PM

My dear friend, your shining comments and warm sentiments are so encouraging and most appreciated. Thank you for your fav and for sharing your precious thoughts with me, Robert. Your friendship is a blessing. I hope all is well with you and yours.. Warmest wishes always my wonderful friend.. ~Susan

Paul Callus

Date: 4/7/2019 3:01:00 AM

Three lines of poetic beauty, Susan! I can vividly bring to mind this striking image which you project, and relish its metaphorical content. ~ Warm regards, my friend; being looking out for you:) // paul

Susan Ashley
Date: 10/9/2023 6:14:00 PM

Oh my dear friend, your subtle hint was definitely lost on me! Lol! I always did wonder though, why you worded your first phrase like that.. maybe that’s why this poem immediately came to mind when you suggested using the tristich form on my poem Rain. This light bulb moment was several years in the making hahaha! Thank you my dear friend for affirming the poetry form change and for your generous and genuine kindness. Warmest wishes and hugs.. ~Susan :)

Paul Callus
Date: 10/8/2023 12:10:00 PM

Yes, my friend; I agree with the choice of form:) My (above) first phrase had been a subtle hint :) I admire your resilience and will to reach perfection! Warm regards & Hugs // paul

Susan Ashley
Date: 4/7/2019 7:33:00 PM

My dear friend, I relish your vibrant comments, they warm my heart. Thank you for sharing your wonderful thoughts with me, Paul. 2019 has been a pretty challenging year so far, hopefully I'll have more time here at PS soon. I've missed your poetry and our interactions, my inspiring friend. I hope all is well with you and yours. Warmest wishes and hugs always.. ~Susan

Maureen Mcgreavy

Date: 4/6/2019 10:12:00 PM

Powerful pen! That first line especially visceral. Good luckin the contest Lovely! xomo

Susan Ashley
Date: 4/7/2019 7:27:00 PM

Thank you, Mo, your wonderful comments uplift me. I'm so happy you felt my poem. Warmest wishes my lovely friend.. ~Susan <3

Tom Cunningham

Date: 4/6/2019 9:55:00 AM

Sometimes barriers' stop us from achieving our dreams, a lot said in three lines Susan. Nice to see you back on soup, hope things are ok. Tom

Susan Ashley
Date: 4/6/2019 10:56:00 AM

Thank you, Tom for being the first to leave such a thoughtful comment, there’s a lot of truth there. Thank you for your kind sentiments, as well, things are getting back to normal. My family and myself were sick with the flu during the month of March and my 92 year old Dad was hospitalized for 3 weeks due to flu complications. He’s home now, back to his usual spunky self - thank God! I hope all is well with you, my friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan