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A Twilight Robbery- Pick a Line and Like a Hooked Fish Run with it

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May. 3. 2024
Pick a Line and Like a Hooked Fish Run with it, Poetry Contest
Sponsor- John Lawless

 

Line of Inquiry “I wasn’t sure what it was he said but it meant a lot to me.” When there was still daylight lingering, And the wind was upon the leaves, And every leaf trembled at its touch, On my balcony, I lazily sat. My mind strayed like a vagabond, Through the strange terrains of dreams, Never settling anywhere, Hovering over myriad things. I was on the fringe of another world, Idly watching the shadows chasing the light, And the autumn clouds scurrying past , In endless quest across the sky. Feeling the breath of passing breeze I wasn’t sure how long I sat there, In my trance, did I hear a grating sound? Yes, a shut window opened somewhere near. It was in the house opposite to mine. In dim light, I saw a masculine figure behind the veil A panther crouching under the foliage of a forest! On that golden dusk, his eyes gleamed, Sending out piercing shafts. His eyes had the shine of a thousand stars And in an instant, they got locked in mine I don’t know what made me take my violin. As I moved my fingers on its strings, From it, flowed a sweet song of love. I saw him rising slowly from where he sat And coming closer, he parted the curtain And smiled at me a gentle seductive smile. From his sealed lips, some words escaped As if proclaiming aloud- ‘I love you’! I didn’t hear what he said, yet it meant so much to me. I fell into a swoon, knew a sweet sensation Creeping into me, drowning me inch by inch We were so close, only eyelids away And how I wished to be meshed into him! I knew that in the depths of my sentient heart, He made his permanent residence! For long I carried the memory, Of his passionate glance, seductive smile and sweet words, Thrown across to me from an open window, On a mild windy night of song, silence and shadows. Again and again, it awakened in me, A wistful longing, I hardly could resist, Until it became a picture frozen in time. On that gathering dusk lit in golden glow Did he rob me in secret and carry me unawares, On the languid wings of his honeyed words? Or when he broke open that window, Did he break open my heart too, And enter it unbidden?

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Date: 5/4/2024 6:22:00 AM
We always Clive to the things we aren't so sure about. We want to hold on to the fact that we probably heard right, but what if we didn't? Always a great time reading your piece. He did Rob you in secret, lol.
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Date: 5/3/2024 5:02:00 PM
Beautiful, I will always be amazed at this gift in storytelling you have, so elegantly and captivating, love this, thanks for sharing your beautiful gift with us all: )
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Date: 5/3/2024 3:47:00 PM
a captivating story well said, dear Valsa. I enjoyed the fluidity of your storytelling along with the imagery, etc. I loved the hint of mystery and intrigue. You're truly gifted, Valsa, and I can feel the essence of your soul in the way you write. Have a wonderful evening, Sara
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Date: 5/3/2024 1:15:00 PM
Hey Valsa.. Your poem captures a moment of enchantment and fleeting connection, weaving together imagery of nature, music, and desire to evoke a sense of longing and mystery.
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Date: 5/3/2024 12:58:00 PM
Your outstanding and influential work in various kinds of writing and communication is just outstanding dear Valsa! However, your diction lyrical fluidity, and effortless flow remain exceptional. Your poem flows so well, it reads like a book! Very creative and unique idea! Fantastic storytelling, full of life and magic. A sentiment of nostalgic yearning that is so enjoyable. Best wishes for the contest.
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Date: 5/3/2024 10:11:00 AM
A great wistful story. Enjoyed your story telling calibre. All of us have such memorable moments.
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Date: 5/3/2024 7:31:00 AM
Wow! Quite the twist…twisted!
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Date: 5/3/2024 4:20:00 AM
Wow you really surprise me everytime sweet valsa, your various different ways of expressing and writing truly makes you stand out! I wouldnt have guessed this was you if i were the judge of the contest but one thing remains constant for sure how poetically fluent you are with words and how seamlessly your words flow! I love the way this free verse unfolds, has a storytelling vibe to it too! Clever and creative! I especially love “ I don’t know what made me take my violin. As I moved my-“ how descriptive and captivating is the way you write! So good! I love it! Pleasure reading this! Sending you light always! Best wishes for the contest. Fave
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Date: 5/3/2024 2:15:00 AM
Great storytelling, so vivid and enchanting. A wistful longing, I hardly could resist describing your poem in this way. Blessings
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Date: 5/3/2024 1:51:00 AM
- Thank you for sharing this memory, Valsa ... vividly told ... best wishes in the contest :) - Have a lovely weekend :) - hugs
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Date: 5/3/2024 12:30:00 AM
You're a great storyteller Valsa, an enjoyable read. Best of luck in the contest, hope you are keeping well. Tom
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