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Poetic Form: Crown of Sonnets: Italian or Petrachan
Inspired: 2024 April 30
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#13: Close One, & Cigars To the accords of The Book of Life ... cheers, loose ends of the created stoic string crisscross a heedless sea of empty tears. In the facade of guilt, all seems trifling. Metallica Horizons all are round, languages changing from their Mother Tongues, World Clock, reassemble to Zero down. New tastes, new sounds ... The Song of Flower Drums from Southerners, not quite, the cowboy type. Bowls bleed of beets, ... have fun chow from Macao. Americans, ... where? ... flagless world, all hype ... Russians, Chinese, there ... steak, Mindanao. Ex-lives work as one, building their Starships, human chain meant Starman ... breathing room trips.

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Date: 4/30/2024 5:55:00 AM
at first blush, your poem seems to be a string of random thoughts. After re-reading, I can see the flow and the message. The ending grabbed me: "breathing room trips." enjoy your day, Sara
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Date: 4/30/2024 6:42:00 AM
Kid's, go to your rooms and take a breather--ahh, CAPITAL IDEA, breathing room! Enjoy your cigarless day, Sara. Aloha, William

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