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A Memory Scorned

a memory scorned it was a different type of silence long ago that ate the morning sun in the cathedral between the pillars bleeding into life you and I the faint taste of rain on our tongues a mem..y sco…. wavering over cool roots, unsteady the wisdom of water stretching our bodies into deep cold pleated hair twisting towards the light halos aslant on flat stones worn by the atmosphere below a me…y s…… now we drink the night and pass the moon between us in this madness in this sorrow in this the cathedral made of time within us, eating… . me…. ……. (alive)

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Date: 3/11/2024 4:35:00 PM
Whoah, raw- the flow was beautiful
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Mat Ignacio
Date: 3/12/2024 3:20:00 PM
thank you paige - kindest regards
Date: 3/4/2024 6:43:00 PM
Dear Mat, this is a haunting and evocative poem. The fragmented form and repetition of "a memory scorned" create a sense of loss and longing. The imagery is rich and symbolic – the cathedral, the cool roots, the halos on flat stones. It feels like a glimpse into a passionate, lost love, perhaps tainted by betrayal ("sorrow"). The final line "alive" is a powerful twist, suggesting the memory, though painful, remains a potent force. Is there more to the story? The poem leaves a lasting impression. - Blessings, Daniel
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Mat Ignacio
Date: 3/4/2024 7:33:00 PM
thank you for your detailed insight and overall interpretation - your ability to (with all of your comments I see on PS) provide depth and praise speaks to your passion for the creative word - deepest gratitude
Date: 3/4/2024 4:56:00 AM
I like how you depict the memory fading by the first lines of your stanzas. Took me a bit to figure it out. You have a unique style, for sure. That's a good thing
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Mat Ignacio
Date: 3/4/2024 6:22:00 AM
Thank you Tom for taking the time - my appreciation