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A Life Not Lived

Philanthropic phrases of pluto sink In my soul, a slave of lonely black Charade, whilst butterflies flutter In bruised heart, as pressed flowers Grieve in between snowflake- Pages of swan's fogged Diary; I Crawl upon valleys To Touch The peach Arc of the Sun and kiss the Skin of polished blue Crescent, but I drown in Sapphire waves and garnet flames, Carving artificial blood on Nymph's ruby rocks; who will remember The parched floral thoughts of a life not lived?

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Paige Hind

Date: 1/22/2024 7:21:00 PM

Ah, I haven't read this one yet. " whilst butterflies flutter In bruised heart, as pressed flowers Grieve in between snowflake" and your references to pluto...compelling and beautiful.

Valsa George

Date: 9/23/2023 10:10:00 PM

"butterflies flutter In bruised heart, as pressed flowers" 'pages of swan's fogged diary'....'Sapphire waves and garnet flames,' .....! Amazing range of images. Your creativity and word power are simply superb, dear Hiya. "Who will remember The parched floral thoughts of a life not lived? " This closing line is a gem. But be assured, your thoughts are never parched, they will stand apart and live on.

Sotto Poet

Date: 9/21/2023 6:04:00 PM

Dear Hiya, your exceptional piece on a great subject and complex form was truly enlightening. The vivid imagery, skillful employment of metaphors, and compelling arguments showcased in your writing are truly magnificent. Congratulations on your well-deserved win.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/21/2023 12:54:00 PM

As long as someone who knew you is still alive, you will live on in their memory. And we all live on in the next life when we reunite with loved ones. Good poem

Sotto Poet

Date: 9/20/2023 4:55:00 PM

Your construction of this poem displays immense creativity, Hiya. It is a mesmerizing piece filled with exquisite language and profound ideas. This work is truly a precious masterpiece that should be cherished and held close during times when the spirit yearns for solace. Its beauty is awe-inspiring and its brilliance shines through every line.

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 9/20/2023 2:36:00 PM

a captivating poem with beautiful words and thoughts. I liked it, Sara

Robert Lindley

Date: 9/20/2023 5:26:00 AM

Very well done my good friend. I have never done this form. Yours exceptional poem gives me thought to maybe do one soon! A fine fav fo me. God bless you my good friend.

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 9/20/2023 2:44:00 AM

This is a true gem to be savored and kept for those moments when the soul needs a blessing! Beautiful and breathtaking and brilliant! God bless you. Love, Gina

Fading Star Silence

Date: 9/19/2023 5:11:00 PM

Ahhh..your poetry always pulls at my heart and soul strings, beautiful brilliant poetess! I sink into the beauty and grace of your poems, the depth and meaning behind your words that you weave so flawlessly, crawls into my soul and makes a home! I’m so honored to read and feel your works of art, beautiful soul! <3

Bill Baker

Date: 9/19/2023 4:28:00 PM

A lovely double Etheree Poem, Hiya. I liked the way you maintained the flow of the poem with your descending and ascending word choices. The imagery was exquisite and the ending intriguing. A FAV for my list young poet. Smiles ~ Blessings Bill

Vijay Pandit

Date: 9/19/2023 4:00:00 PM

Perfectly executed with the right blend of color and emotions, Hiya. Your vocabulary always so impressive. Awesome ending: Who will remember The parched floral thoughts of a life not lived?

Silent One

Date: 9/19/2023 12:57:00 PM

Well done on your double etheree, a lot of emotions in this one.. always nice to see different forms.. I have a few of these somewhere.. I might try one soon.. great use of words and how you weaved them together against the syllable restrictions... I like the last two lines.. great imagery in them..

Jay Narain

Date: 9/19/2023 11:20:00 AM

Nice Etheree format poem. Good thoughts, You are fabulous poet.

Christina Bowring

Date: 9/19/2023 8:55:00 AM

Gosh this is stunning dear Hiya. So beautifully written. I’ve never attempted this form before but I know that this is a masterclass in how it’s done! ‘In bruised heart, as pressed flowers,’ ‘ Skin of polished blue’ and those last two lines are outstanding as are you dear soul. Inspiring as always. Blessings to you :):)

Tom Woody

Date: 9/19/2023 8:47:00 AM

Most of mankind lives and dies with little remembrance. Still, makes sense to live a worthy, clean life full of love, kindness, generosity. You're young. Many pages to be yet written

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 9/19/2023 8:30:00 AM

It's been quite a while since I used this form. Lazy! Free verse comes so easily. Still your Etheree is so wonderful to read. Such visuals that hearten the heart and great ideas. Great poetry.

Gordon Mcconnell

Date: 9/19/2023 8:23:00 AM

nice one Hiya, with lovely imagery too. Have a great day, Gordon

Arastu Goyal

Date: 9/19/2023 8:00:00 AM

I loved the imagery in this one! I was not aware of this form but I did some research on it, after doing that I am very impressed by the way you expressed so many things following so many rules! Nicely written, -AG

Sara Kendrick

Date: 9/19/2023 6:42:00 AM

Got that right. Who will remember a life not lived. Thanks for sharing this one with us today. Your visits to my pages are always uplifting. Sara

Hiya Sharma
Date: 9/24/2023 3:08:00 AM

Thank you so much for your precious visit to my page, dear Sara, your words are so kind.. I'm grateful for this beautiful feedback, sending love :)

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 9/19/2023 6:30:00 AM

but I drown in Sapphire waves and garnet flames…powerful imagery!

Hiya Sharma
Date: 9/20/2023 10:55:00 PM

Awwn, thank you so much dear Kim, I appreciate your kind feedback, thank you so much for visiting :)

John Lawless

Date: 9/19/2023 6:20:00 AM

I was frightened by an Etheree in my youth yet this masterful use of the form may force me to confront my fear. This is an amazing use of the form and an even more amazing poetic expression. i shall FAVE this.

Hiya Sharma
Date: 9/20/2023 10:54:00 PM

Oh, thank you so much for honouring my poem with such high praise and for the Fav as well.. Truly means a lot! I love experimenting with new forms and expressing in imagery, so I'm very grateful that you enjoyed reading this, really :)

Ink Empress

Date: 9/19/2023 5:56:00 AM

Etherees are always my fave form to do. I really love this poem cus of how although you were sticking to a syllable count and structure, you managed to express in such an evocative and heartfelt manner that makes me feel so much: and your use of colors and descriptive wordplay is as always phenomenal! I especially loved “ the peach arc of the sun” “ sapphire waves and garnet flames” whoa. And that last line pulled my heartstrings just so deeply. For an 18 yr old, u write gold! Seriously so good

Hiya Sharma
Date: 9/20/2023 10:51:00 PM

Awwn, thank you so much dear Ink, you're always soooo sweet! I truly appreciate these kind words and am so glad that your loved reading this.. Means a lot, coming from such a stellar poetess like you, sending love :)