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I walked in darkness along the shore seeking only solitude and nothing more Thunder drummed from somewhere far away like foreboding timpani as clouds began to play They competed with the roar of bally waves crashing to the beach in rhythmic laves Everything was out of reach for me the moon, the stars, the depth of the sea Echoes of a nocturne were swirling in my head Lyrics left unsung, but spoken instead My soprano continued; the falsetto stopped Too weak to stand, on my knees I dropped My footprints had been erased by an ebbing tide No longer able to run. I chose not to hide Blind in the darkness, my loneliness daunting a flash of lightning, then another more taunting I lifted my eyes to the sky, to the falling rain its sting delivered in a medley, staccatos of pain On the edge of the sea, I waited for the end of me My tears an ensemble, an elegy in requiem plea I ignored the orchestra when I heard the ocean call louder than kettle drums or the storm's howling squall No encore would this night be able to reprise When the flowing tide encroached, I closed weary eyes A chorus of waves crashed like cymbals in concerto stealing the baton from the hand of the Maestro The moon and stars were out of reach for me I wept as I was swept into the depth of the sea August 28, 2022 2022 Marathon Mile 13 Contest Sponsored by Mark Toney

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Date: 11/14/2023 1:06:00 PM
Congratulations on this winning work in Robert's contest. Way to go. Thanks for sharing it with us, Sara K
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Date: 10/12/2023 8:04:00 AM
My soprano continued; the falsetto stopped! - ah! beautiful... A dark night by the shore orchestrated with words - amazing poetic capacity!!
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Date: 10/12/2023 9:57:00 AM
Hello, Marshall. Thank you for reaching back to read this one and leaving me your thoughtful comments.
Date: 9/12/2022 11:50:00 AM
Dear Lin, I was captivated by the edgy aching dark emotions of your exquisite poem. A metaphorical beauty of depth and poetic finesse. Your vivid last line (with the accent of internal rhyme) is a fantastic finale to a passion-filled piece. Congratulations for your excellent win in Mark’s contest. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Date: 9/13/2022 5:51:00 AM
Susan, we could trade accolades with each other for days, and I'd still feel I owe you more. Thank you for your wonderful reviews of my poetry.
Date: 9/12/2022 10:03:00 AM
Lin, wow, what a great poem and congratulations on your win in the contest, blessings ~
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Date: 9/13/2022 5:50:00 AM
Thank you, Constance.
Date: 9/11/2022 8:35:00 PM
Lin, your poetry is superb and your metaphors extraordinary. How sad that your subject sought "only solitude and nothing more", and ends up being "swept into the depth of the sea". A Fav for me. Congratulations on your win on Mile 13 of my 2022 Poetry Marathon Contest. Keep your running shoes on, because Mile 14 has already started!
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Date: 9/13/2022 5:49:00 AM
Thank you, Mark.
Date: 9/11/2022 8:28:00 PM
Great drowning effect - physically and psychologically. Such a obscure scenes, yet realities. Beautiful. Congratulations!
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Date: 9/13/2022 5:49:00 AM
Thanks, Chris.
Date: 9/11/2022 8:26:00 PM
Dark yet compelling ~ a fave. Masterfully crafted, Lin. Warmest congratulations on your win!
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Date: 9/13/2022 5:49:00 AM
Thank you very much.
Date: 9/11/2022 7:33:00 PM
Awful subject, Lin. yet one we have to face, fight and win the battle. Your poetry superb as usual. Congratulation in the Marathon Contest. I'm going to fav this...Harry
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Date: 10/3/2017 7:48:00 AM
Awesome write as usual. Well done Lin. "Blind in the darkness, loneliness daunting a lightning flash, then another, taunting"
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Date: 10/12/2017 4:13:00 PM
Hi Klio, and thanks ever so much for liking this one.
Date: 9/26/2017 7:35:00 PM
"Everything seemed out of reach to me the moon, the stars, the depth of the sea." Love those lines. Thanks for sharing..............peace!
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Date: 10/12/2017 4:12:00 PM
Thank you very much for the kind comments, Richard.
Date: 9/24/2017 4:11:00 PM
How did I miss this, this is so very enchanting and the type of poetry I love reading! a fav! and congrats on POTW!
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Date: 9/24/2017 6:13:00 PM
I read you the first time. lol Thanks, Arthur.
Date: 9/24/2017 4:10:00 PM
How did I miss this, this is so very enchanting and the type of poetry I love reading! a fav! and congrats on POTW!
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Date: 9/24/2017 6:12:00 PM
You haven't missed it... Here you are, leaving charming comments.
Date: 9/24/2017 3:26:00 AM
I'm saddened this gem has received such few comments since being awarded POTW people usually flock to comment on such work Lin:-( hugs jan xx
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Date: 9/24/2017 5:31:00 AM
Jan, you are so kind to leave this sweet note, but you're not to worry about the lack of comments. I know it's been read by many who'd never want me to know they have, but what makes me smile is that I see the names of those poets here who are most dear to me. Thank you for being a loving friend. ;-)
Date: 9/20/2017 4:08:00 PM
Congratulations on this jewel being chosen as POTW my friend. Just more proof that you are an amazingly talented poet... A fav.....
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Date: 9/21/2017 3:01:00 PM
Thank you so very much for your kind remarks, Robert.
Date: 9/19/2017 8:47:00 PM
Bravo,bravo,Lin I enjoy all of your writes but this one is special. Of course a big fave! Congrats on POTW belated but heartfelt.
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Date: 9/21/2017 3:00:00 PM
Thank you, John. I know for sure all your comments are sincere and they're greatly appreciated.
Date: 9/19/2017 11:25:00 AM
This is a masterpiece. Very good...Enjoyed it all...Have a nice day
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Date: 9/19/2017 12:04:00 PM
This poem was not preconceived, wasn't prompted by a contest, but it just seemed to take on life by itself as it progressed. Thank you for the grand comments, Arturo.
Date: 9/17/2017 12:55:00 PM
Wow Lin you deserve a standing ovation for this musical masterpiece. Many congrats on POTW:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 9/17/2017 7:50:00 PM
I can hear you applauding...lol Thanks, Jan.
Date: 9/17/2017 10:47:00 AM
It's just the best! Congratulations!
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Date: 9/17/2017 7:50:00 PM
Thanks ever so much.
Date: 9/17/2017 9:48:00 AM
Congrats on POTW, Lin!
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Date: 9/17/2017 10:11:00 AM
Thanks a lot, Dale.
Date: 9/17/2017 7:39:00 AM
Congrats Lin on POTW
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Lin Lane
Date: 9/17/2017 8:50:00 AM
Well, thanks for the info and congrats, Tim.
Date: 9/15/2017 7:03:00 AM
Such mindblowing concert deserves more than a standing applause, dear Lin:) I'm awestruck:)
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Lin Lane
Date: 9/15/2017 9:38:00 AM
Thanks so very much, Jo. Your comments are awesome.
Date: 9/14/2017 10:01:00 PM
This is just wonderful - sublimely musical and with a rhythm exquisite ... I am a musician, first-and-foremost, and I must fav this one! I have read it three times, and need to again - that is unusual for me. Gorgeous! Blessings, Lin. <3
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Date: 9/15/2017 9:37:00 AM
I know your dedication to music, Greg. So I'm truly honored that you've read this one so many times. Thank you for adding it to your favorites.
Date: 9/14/2017 10:15:00 AM
I'd like to have the menu(program) for this 'Concerto' lol...a musical masterpiece Lin...best wishes...^WW^
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Lin Lane
Date: 9/14/2017 10:30:00 AM
Thanks, WW. If you find the fallen baton, would you let me know?
Date: 9/13/2017 8:26:00 PM
There is music in your poem, Lin.
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Lin Lane
Date: 9/14/2017 10:29:00 AM
How sweet is your comment, Agnes...thanks very much.
Date: 9/13/2017 8:17:00 PM
such beautiful language, lin! masterful!
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Lin Lane
Date: 9/14/2017 10:29:00 AM
I always appreciate your visits and comments, Ilene. Thanks so much.
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