500 Days

When first I swayed her eyes a perfect round, With hair that fell so circular and dark. Spherical girl -- not rotund or fat-bound, With curves that flow in wide expanse of arc. By dawn the night does wane to working day. With awe I fill her every need profound -- A pup to fetch and run the word, obey. My Summer's smile augments a love unbound. Yet, smiles are few and eyes a glazing dim. No touch returned for softly warm caress. I beg her, please, recount my every sin: "Nothing," says she, a wisp so vaporous. Summer left a tasteless void of season; Autumn blows a gust of destined reason.... September 19, 2016 Movie Mania - Romance - Poetry Contest Inspired by the romantic comedy, 500 Days of Summer (2009)

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Ovidiu Bocsa

Date: 8/12/2017 5:36:00 AM

If I am allowed to observe this sonnet is great like the others written and unwritten ones: because I feel the noble spirit of rare poets mixing colors in such blessed manner. I beg pardon to poetry for my awkward attempts and insistence and imaginary sins. I imagine myself as Mr. Pickwick tasting Romanticism and rheumatism:love is too child to ask her reason and it may change the decision of any season; even if autumn or winter seem empty , they have rich imagery:It's pleasin'.

Phillip Garcia

Date: 10/8/2016 7:46:00 PM

I don't know how I missed this the other day but I'm glad I saw it now. This is SPECTACULAR. Love it- very eloquently penned

Tom Arnone
Date: 10/8/2016 10:13:00 PM

Thanks, Phillip! :-)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/6/2016 8:23:00 PM

Hey, where is your one liner on yourself?? I was hoping to find one here!!

Tom Arnone
Date: 10/6/2016 9:54:00 PM

To busy, A. D. Can't be in all of them. How are you feeling? Love when you stop by. :-) Addendum: 10/8/2016 I wasn't aware of this contest. How could I have missed it? Bad Tom! :-)

Darren White

Date: 10/5/2016 12:25:00 AM

That's a wonderful poem! Congratulations on your 1st place!

Tom Arnone
Date: 10/5/2016 7:54:00 AM

Thanks, Darren! :-)

Afzal Nusker

Date: 10/4/2016 11:47:00 PM

Fabulous poem, Tom. Enjoyed it very much.

Tom Arnone
Date: 10/5/2016 7:55:00 AM

Thanks for the kind words, Afzal.

Pashang Salehi

Date: 9/29/2016 6:17:00 PM

Hi Tom, I don't know what the seeker sought. I loved the eyes, the hair, the curve in the night, at dawn and the day.... Cheers

Pashang Salehi
Date: 10/1/2016 6:29:00 PM

Nothing is perfect, but yours was complete....

Tom Arnone
Date: 9/30/2016 12:28:00 PM

The Seeker is cool. He's just a perfectionist. ;-)

Scott Thirtyseven

Date: 9/29/2016 1:22:00 PM

Definitely one of my preferred romance flicks, but I watched it some time ago. Having said that I really enjoy your ...wisp so vaporous... line. It sums up her part in the movie for me. Great work, best of luck in the contest.

Tom Arnone
Date: 9/30/2016 12:24:00 PM

Thanks, Scott!

W. Thomas Markham

Date: 9/27/2016 9:31:00 AM

Nice piece. Very visual.

Tom Arnone
Date: 9/27/2016 10:51:00 AM

Thank You, W. T. M.