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May 5, 2024

cosmo: informal name for the cosmopolitan cocktail


 

Oh you know the type— the orchid woman a cosmopolitan who cosmo sips between snips of gist her charisma a starship —collides with your star-full eyes supernova for Casanova her pouty lips knit a magazine smile rows of sugar-white pearls strung shiny straight behind wet-red slicks of a Revlon stick —cherry-juice bait dilates your want to taste orchid woman’s glamorized mouth for the masses to idolize for many to fantasize for her to tantalize and advertise there’s no need to compromise with you or your penny-candy conversation— when beauty is legal tender why invest in a waste of words? ooh, orchid woman w-i-l-d an exotic sun-tanned narcotic erotic her despotic bloom quixotic your contemplation; your entangled-limbs-expectation that this frilly filly blooms just for you and oh! just look how the honey makers buzz and money-makers spend their sums— worker bees blinded by her blonde neon fall in her wake… or maybe “diamond pro’s” bling stings and wrings their eyes …who cares who falls.. when mere red rose adorations and sticky sap Hallmark incantations bear not the fruits of 24-karat donations— Mmm! Mmm! her traipse does shake like mango jelly sweet orchid woman’s long-stemmed catwalk walk; full-rounded bouncy-buoyant.. yet racy yup.. a thoroughbred— she’ll have you ridin’ high to your credit and blame you won’t feel her stiletto tips when she diva-gold-digs ya as nothing more than a runway-ramp all slinky-strut-hips and stay-the-night-vamp till fly girl wields her strappy high-heels in a rhythmical click-clack all over the next middle-age stage indeed! orchid woman a hot-house hottie fussy stuffy lil hussy— ...too much water? ….not enough water?! oh no! she’s wilted— sniffle.. snivel.. “where did I go wrong?!!” mm-hmm.. high maintenance is s-u-c-h a turn on… yeah… orchid woman is w-i-l-d (eye roll..)

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Date: 5/18/2024 11:42:00 AM
Congratulations on this beautifully written poem! Orchids are too demanding. I prefer mountain daisies.
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Date: 5/15/2024 10:12:00 AM
Susan, you've excited this reader. My sister collected Cosmopolitan Magazine, when I glanced at Gia Carangi on the cover. Stunning model I would follow, I loved her angelic smile little (hussy)! aha A movie made of her, starring Anjolina Jolie! The imagery you portray of a beautiful wild orchid woman is exquisite; indeed the image is angelic, but what goes on behind the scenes is erotic, dangerous yet such beauty trumps and…who cares who falls.. ahooo Congratulations on your gorgeous trophy win Susan! I brought Pink Vampagne let’s clink to that ;)
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Date: 5/16/2024 5:56:00 PM
Dearest Anaya, your fantastic comments have delighted and brightened this poetess! Indeed, I remember Gia Carangi and her tragic demise. I've seen the movie depicting her life with Angelina Jolie too. I'm so glad you enjoyed the spirit of this poem. Thank you for sharing your treasured thoughts and celebratory congrats with me, I'm elated dear poetess! Now let's pop the cork of the pink bubbly (how nice of you to bring it! lol), raise the glass and clink to friendship and poetry :) Warmest wishes my sweet friend.. ~Susan
Date: 5/15/2024 6:44:00 AM
Dear Susan, your poem beautifully portrays the "orchid woman" as a polished and too preoccupied woman. The focal point revolves around the intricate nature of this woman's persona—her allure, her superficial attributes, and her appeal. The inclusion of vivid imagery such as "rows of sugar-white pearls," "cherry-juice bait," and "diamond pro's bling" effectively creates a distinct and vivid mental depiction of the orchid woman. The addition of lavish and evocative language creates an atmosphere of sophisticated elegance. The integration of alliteration ("cosmo sips," "rows of sugar-white pearls"), simile ("her traipse does shake like mango jelly sweet"), and metaphor ("her charisma a starship") enhances the depiction of the orchid woman and intensifies the effect of the visuals. Congratulations on your well-deserved trophy win.
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Date: 5/16/2024 5:44:00 PM
Dear Sotto, it's a delight to receive your detailed comments. Indeed, you summarize my poem so well.. society/humanity and individuals would be well served to reconsider and recognize the value of substance over "superficial attributes". I relish knowing what aspects of my poem truly appeals to you. Thank you for sharing in the emotions and imagery of this poem with me. Your esteemed thoughts and your stellar poetry are both held in my deepest appreciation. Warmest wishes my poet friend.. ~Susan
Date: 5/8/2024 1:15:00 PM
wow, this is amazing metaphor extended all the way to the interesting ending. Love this.
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Date: 5/9/2024 6:15:00 PM
Thank you, dear Andrea. Both your visit and uplifting comments are appreciated. Warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan
Date: 5/6/2024 5:14:00 PM
This is just delicious, Susan, everything wicked and juicy of the forbidden fruit, then the inevitable fall, just love 'supernova for Casanova' and 'penny candy coversation' - sweet and hard at once, another winner for you!
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Date: 5/9/2024 6:17:00 PM
Dear Michelle, it's so nice to see you! Your poetic presence has been missed. I'm so glad to know you enjoyed my poem and the specific phrases you mentioned. Thank you for your precious comments and kindness, my wonderful friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 5/6/2024 7:08:00 AM
This was so much fun to read. It’s filled with imagery and intrigue. Bravo!
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Date: 5/9/2024 6:18:00 PM
Dear Richard, thank you for your gracious visit and wonderful comments. Your esteemed presence here is appreciated. Warmest wishes, my poet friend.. ~Susan
Date: 5/6/2024 5:57:00 AM
Dear Susan, I loved the essence of the cosmopolitan woman with such wonderful imagery and sharp wit, along with the orchid woman, which seems to be a symbol of allure and complexity. Susan, your playful language and clever observations reveal the dichotomy between surface glamour and inner depth, showing the nature of attraction and desire. A very captivating exploration of femininity and perception. - Blessings, Daniel
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Date: 5/9/2024 6:29:00 PM
Dear Daniel, the depth and breadth of your comments are received with my truest appreciation. You see into the heart of my poem with deep poetic perception, a blend of insight and intellect. It is both elating and touching. I relish your thoughtful remarks as much as I revel in your amazing poetry. Thank you for your gracious visit and for your kindness. Warmest wishes my poet friend.. ~Susan
Date: 5/6/2024 5:33:00 AM
Oh, wow, Susan, you have wowed me again with this dynamic poem. The assonance in each stanza is striking and adds punch to each image "idolize, fantasize, tantalize" and "exotic, narcotic, erotic." And the poem clips right along, as with this fast woman of the poem! Well-done, good read. Carol Louise
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Date: 5/9/2024 6:03:00 PM
Dear Carol Louise, it's wonderful to see you! Your gracious visit and wonderful comments are uplifting. I'm so glad to know you enjoyed my poem and I especially appreciate knowing what stood out for you. Thank you for sharing your precious thoughts with me, my sweet friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 5/5/2024 9:30:00 PM
Orchids! I had two of them and both died. To water or not to water! Always a dilemma. And to meet an orchid woman would present the same erotic dilemma. Fall for her or not. Her beauty is impeccable, her mien out of this world. How well you describe her in metaphoric terms. Such imagery is from a difficult but favorite plant. Is she unattainable? Great imagery. Great poetry.
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Date: 5/9/2024 5:58:00 PM
Dear Victor, your poet's soul reads into my poem with clarity. Thank you for your insightful comments, they are truly appreciated my friend. I'm so glad to know you enjoyed my poem.. and I'm sorry to hear about your actual orchids that died. Indeed, they are fussy! Warmest wishes my poet friend.. ~Susan
Date: 5/5/2024 8:22:00 PM
hmm. I guess I'm not familiar with the tantalizing, temptress-type you've portrayed, Susan... Though I have taken an intensive inter(active) course with Raggedy Anne and Second-hand Rose, as well as exchanged meaningful platonic eyeball rolls-in the-hay with Calamity Jane and Annie-get-your-gun-and-salute! lol. ~ Call Me Ish-Male (Ish in Hebrew = Man. How about that?!)
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Date: 5/9/2024 5:55:00 PM
Haha! Dear Gershon, could you get any sillier? Thank you for your witty comments and for your reply to your own comments lol! Warmest wishes my poet friend.. ~Susan
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Date: 5/5/2024 8:24:00 PM
Literary references always get me my woman, you know. (And who else do you know who replies to his own comments?) Mr. Modest Lee Endowed
Date: 5/5/2024 4:56:00 PM
I felt I was experiencing glamor and glitz as I read your poem about the orchid woman. Such descriptive words and unique vocabulary (hot-house hottie, fussy stuffy hussy, etc) Despite all her glamour, she wilted (perhaps from age) showing me, that despite her allure, she was a shallow woman indeed. A beautiful read! Great job! Have a great evening, hugs, Sara
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Date: 5/9/2024 5:51:00 PM
Dear Sara, indeed, she is a shallow woman who wilts when she's not being constantly fawned over. I'm so glad to know you enjoyed my poem. Your gracious visit and insightful comments make my day! Your gifted poetic expression and inspiring friendship is cherished. Thank you, my sweet friend, for your kindness. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 5/5/2024 4:07:00 PM
Dear Susan, your poem perfectly portrays the essence of the "Orchid Woman," a woman who is both stunning and meticulous in her appearance. And explores beauty's captivating nature and apathy, along with the vilification and unjust norms imposed on women. You skillfully employ vivid and enticing descriptive language to paint a vivid picture of the orchid woman. Phrases such as "cosmo sips," "rows of sugar-white pearls," and "cherry-juice bait" are used to enhance the description. The way you choose your words evokes a feeling of opulence and sparkle, but it also implies a lack of depth and shallowness. The poetry is enhanced by the use of alliteration ("pouty lips," "sticky sap," "rhythmical click-clack") and simile ("traipse does shake like mango jelly sweet").
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Date: 5/8/2024 12:53:00 PM
Dear Sotto, it's a delight to receive your detailed comments. I relish knowing what aspects of my poem truly appeals to you. Thank you for sharing in the emotions and imagery of this poem with me. Your esteemed thoughts are held in my deepest appreciation. Warmest wishes my poet friend.. ~Susan
Date: 5/5/2024 12:34:00 PM
My dear friend Susan, This poem paints a vivid portrait of the "orchid woman," a figure who embodies glamour, allure, and complexity. The imagery is rich and evocative, drawing the reader into the world of this cosmopolitan, cosmopolitan-sipping persona. It offers a thought-provoking commentary on beauty, desire, and the illusions we construct around those who embody societal ideals. It challenges notions of authenticity and urges readers to reconsider the value of substance over surface allure.
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Date: 5/8/2024 11:57:00 AM
Dear Silent One, indeed, you summarize my poem so well.. society/humanity would be well served to reconsider and recognize the "value of substance over surface allure". Thank you for sharing your esteemed thought with me. Your soulful presence and amazing poetry are ever appreciated. Warmest wishes my inspiring friend.. ~Susan
Date: 5/5/2024 12:28:00 PM
A wild woman you have caught in a poetic jar and eyed her from all sides! Fantastic imagery, great rhythm, alliteration, and metaphors. A fave ~ Kim
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Date: 5/8/2024 11:06:00 AM
Dear Kim, I relish and revel in your expressive comments. Thank you for sharing your esteemed poetic thoughts with me and for the honor of your Fave. Both are treasured. I adore your new pic! Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 5/5/2024 12:27:00 PM
i savoured every line of this, the wordplay, inventive word combos, internal rhyme, reminds me a bit of a poet called abigail parry..i'd be proud to write something like this, you should submit it to a professional comp or journal cos it's easily good enough
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Date: 5/8/2024 11:04:00 AM
Dear Charlotte, as an admirer of your mighty and magnificent pen, I am elated to receive your stunning remarks. Thank you for sharing in the emotions and imagery of this poem with me. I am honored and humbled by your words and by your mention of Abigail Parry. I looked her up and I adore her animated, expressive poetry recitations and will continue to explore her masterworks. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 5/5/2024 10:54:00 AM
Ha! Artificiality at its poetic best. Funny thing is, though intelligent men (and women) know this they still fall for it (her) hook line and sinker. Sophisticated sexuality on full display, for those in want of heart. Good stuff Suze
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Date: 5/5/2024 7:02:00 PM
Dear Tom, indeed, your thoughtful comments ring true. Thank you for sharing in the imagery and emotions of this poem with me. Your presence and friendship is always appreciated. Warmest wishes, my poet friend.. ~Suze

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