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casting doubt

on the harbour wall thinking about life ~ whilst ripples stirred in the sea a porpoise swam past never to look back ~ a washed up siren wept free some voice called out its a sign of the times ~ that she was always a he as i drowned my life flashed by ~ yet all of the bad bits were new to me By David Kavanagh

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Sand Blown

Date: 5/16/2024 7:27:00 AM

...'ripples....casting doubt....wept free.... times....new to me....'......yes sir.....time be an infinity.....stan

David Kavanagh
Date: 5/16/2024 10:28:00 AM

Ain’t that the truth Stan. It’s coming right up behind us again, cheers David

I Am Anaya

Date: 5/10/2024 1:10:00 PM

It's quite natural for life to cast doubts, as it's full of uncertainties and unexpected turns and expressing your doubts can be the first step towards gaining clarity. I like the term "sign of the times" Another fab Monoku!

David Kavanagh
Date: 5/11/2024 4:51:00 AM

Thank you Anaya, doubt can weigh us all down at times, probably counterbalanced by hope, so many signs of the times about these days, all marketed and rushing headlong into the unknown, cheers David

Buhagiar Victor

Date: 5/10/2024 2:52:00 AM

Though short, so much imagery adorns your monoku.

David Kavanagh
Date: 5/10/2024 6:02:00 AM

I always try to squeeze a bit more out of the short ones Victor, a few well placed words can have a huge impact, in the monoku, cheers David

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 5/9/2024 11:22:00 AM

Hello David, How haunting! The imagery - ripples, porpoise, siren - creates a stark scene. The twist with "a sign of the times" is genius, leaving the reader reeling. The final line cuts deep, hinting at a past of hidden struggles. Powerful! - Blessings, Daniel

David Kavanagh
Date: 5/9/2024 11:48:00 AM

Thank you so much Daniel, you certainly opened up my monoku and took it apart, no mean task by the way, yes a lot of soul searching here, pondering life with peculiar imagery which I purposely used to try cut into the reader’s psyche, I’m humbled by your comment, cheers David

Di11y Da11y

Date: 5/9/2024 3:50:00 AM

All interesting and delivered in such a non judgemental tone. I'm pretty sure the majority of us shouldn't focus on regrets and just be kinder to ourselves. Always fascinating ponderables David, well done

David Kavanagh
Date: 5/9/2024 4:45:00 AM

Heya Dilly, a kind of mishmash picture of life in this one, without hysterics or regrets, with an underlying nonjudgmental or even nonchalant theme swimming about, of course one could read a lot more into it, thanks so much for stopping by and commenting today, cheers David