Winter's Breath

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contest... A Vine in Winter... sponsor Craig Cornish

My heart won't cling to you like a vine holding on, wrapped around yet, like a vine that felt your winter's breath my rich garden of tendrils turned brown as the stem of love died the trestle of my heart is bare and wanting stripped of flowers and leaves, crumbled cast to earth I'll unwind my dead tendrils and leave your empty trestle to another where your winter's breath is waiting

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thriveni c mysore

Date: 3/4/2025 3:14:00 AM

'where your winter's breath is waiting' amazing thought dear poet. congratulations on your win. cheers!!!

Terry Miller

Date: 3/4/2025 1:47:00 AM

Wonderful and so sensitive, congratulations

Paige Hind

Date: 2/14/2025 4:59:00 PM

This is truly beautiful. I don't know how to pick apart my fav lines; but it's in my favs anyway! :)

Susan Ashley

Date: 2/9/2025 10:31:00 AM

Frederic, dear friend, dear poet, the dying vine perfectly expresses the feeling of a withered love; the loss and the decision to detach "unwind". Coldness in a garden of love burns the feelings to turn brown and decay, "flowers and leaves, crumbled/ cast to earth". You capture this heartbreak and resignation with poetic finesse and a hint of what's to come for the next unfortunate lover in the wings. Love that last line! Your golden pen shines my inspiring friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 2/5/2025 11:51:00 AM

- A deeply sensitive poem, Frederic - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs

CayCay Jennings

Date: 2/5/2025 9:38:00 AM

I enjoyed the emotive, poetic expression of your poem, it was hard hitting and aimed clear. CayCay