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We Met Her

we met her we met her in an younger time her thoughts have always lingered on my mind she was caught in an braille net wondering from the blind said i said i said we met her laying down on the pedals of an rose we met her now my love puts on an star lit light show we met her dancing in the reflection guiding moonbeam affection we met her we met her we met her here we met her there space between our kisses has conquered the suns glare shoot me from an open flame teach me to whisper her name unchanged my life just an occur till we met her ?

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Date: 12/25/2017 9:14:00 PM
This is just constructive correction here, but can I suggest that you change 'an' to 'a' before rose, and the again "an" to "a" before 'star lit light show?' Otherwise its perfect. Great poem.....Maria
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Date: 12/26/2017 6:49:00 AM
an sounds better in our head ... only thing that has an a in our book is an knuckle sammich ... corrctly stated ... collective of corrective ... try an correct all we have collected ... corrective criticisms ... he he ha ...

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