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Tonight, the mystical moon languidly drifts in pallid glory while holding night court, clad in a golden silk sarong. Ruling her astral kingdom, amusing the stars with a story about a jumping cow and a spoon; singing a lyrical song. "Wondrous moon," said I," aureate lamp unto this night, may your lustrous pathway stay vigilant and never stray." From celestial height I saw zooming by, myriads of bright, fiery crimson comet tails, flying over a quiet fishing quay. Then, moonlight played on lily pads, afloat on Amon Bay, illuminating croaking frogs, ribbiting and leaping in fun. They bathed in nocturnal frolic until the faint spark of day flirted with saucy winks as if to say, "Good morning, Sun." As morning drew nigh; moonlight sighed and began to dim. Luna removed her halo to crown Sol at the cusping of dawn. Baronial were his warming fingers, but now my vision swims, blurry-eyed, I'm drowning in a whirlpool, trying not to yawn. The mystical moon will glow again tonight with vivid pomp. Once more donning her corona, she'll glow in auras of light. And as sunlight lulls, dulled from his daily exuberant romp, I will waltz in moonlight's shadows, as if I have taken flight.

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Date: 6/1/2024 8:12:00 AM
Lin, an enchantingly beautiful poem. -Hugs
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Lin Lane
Date: 6/2/2024 6:38:00 AM
Thank you so very much, Tania.
Date: 6/1/2024 4:01:00 AM
Captivating poem Lin,. I am still happily lost in this mystical maze...beautifully imagined, constructed with the usual command over language. The imagery is deliciously rich....you have a rare talent for creating such poetic feasts. Reserve my table for the next one...
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Date: 6/2/2024 6:38:00 AM
It's a wonderful realm for relaxing and imagining the moon's hold over us. I appreciate your compliments, Paul. Merci!
Date: 5/31/2024 11:11:00 AM
What a beautiful painting of a serene moonlit night, Lin! Your images are as dazzling as pure moonlight expressed in wonderful alliterations. There is such an ethereal quality in the tone of your poem - ethereal as moonlight itself. When the moon shines tonight, I'll look for a dance partner in the "mystical moon!" Hope the moon's dance card isn't full! Blessings! Thank you for the gentle grace of your poem.
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Date: 6/2/2024 6:36:00 AM
Thank you so very much for your wonderful thoughts about the creation of this luna tale, Sam!
Date: 5/31/2024 8:47:00 AM
Beautiful imagery Lin, you never disappoint your readers. Enjoy your weekend. Tom
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Date: 6/2/2024 6:36:00 AM
Thanks a bunch, Tom. Yesterday was take care of the girls day. Babysitting for Elle and Grace was a 12 hour job and I got home too exhausted to respond to anything in PS. Amanda developed pink eye, now I have to hope none of us catch it... I'm supposed to be flying to Erin's on Friday.
Date: 5/31/2024 7:22:00 AM
Dear Lin, your poem transported me into a whimsical nocturnal realm where the moon reigns mystically "clad in a golden silk sarong." The fiery comet tails, croaking frogs frolicking, Luna removing her halo to crown the sun - delights the senses. But the final stanzas left me breathless - your vision blurring in drowsy "whirlpool", only to be revived by Luna's vivid return, waltzing in her shadows as if taking flight. Sublime, transcendent writing that stirs the soul. I'm in awe of your mastery and magic with words. An incredible gift. -Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel
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Date: 6/2/2024 6:34:00 AM
Thank you ever so much for your review, Daniel. They are always diagnostic, and I appreciate them very much.

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