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Craig Cornish's Contest : The Picture On The Parlor Wall 30 Sept 24
Numb…jammed like rows of canned sardines, bodies avoiding faces labeled as print, ticket stubs, and coats on a 7 pm bullet train bound for home along dim lights on railways : shadows gaze blankly from tight decks cold frozen as still life masking their alienation through buried heaves under woolen scarves… And how passengers’ skin touching each other’s loneliness cringe in the tram ...their expressions hollering loud through silent wails , words hammered like scribbles from neon paint on cans, abstract forms zigzaging on broken halls... graffiti and urban doodles imitate this isolation more black than white ... surreal imprints speaking of holy and irreverent whims.. untold.

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Date: 10/20/2024 7:58:00 AM
Nette, you describe isolation in a remarkable way. It's rather incredible that we can be so close to each other, yet so disinterested and self absorbed. The entire nature of society has certainly become surreal. Smiles
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Date: 10/10/2024 7:19:00 AM
Interesting! Filled with great imagery. Congratulations, Nette!
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Date: 10/9/2024 11:48:00 PM
Creatively and brilliantly painted picture my dearest poet friend Nette. A masterpiece too. Coming back to your page to sojourn in your poetic gallery and found this very precious gem. My Warmest Congratulations on your shining win! Thanks for sharing. God bless you always and your writings. Hugs
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Date: 10/8/2024 8:57:00 PM
Congratulations on your win with this atmospheric piece, Nette. You had me hooked from the word go ... . x Su
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Date: 10/8/2024 5:04:00 PM
Congratulations on your win!
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Date: 10/7/2024 3:28:00 AM
Excellent as is the baseline that remains with you. Glad to see your back.
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Date: 10/1/2024 7:53:00 AM
What a deep and creative take on the prompt this is dear nette! I love the wordplay and flow of this, especially “ from neon paint on cans, abstract forms zigzaging on broken halls... graffiti and urban doodles imitate this isolation more” wow! Just brilliant! I think will be a top win! Best wishes! Sending you light always dear nette.
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