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The Old Rusty Gate

I wished to ascend, so I called a friend, who knew of such things and how to grow wings. ‘God’s abode’s within’, he said, ‘so begin, by simply choosing, head and heart, fusing’. ‘Each impulse distil, aligned with His will’. So I set out thus, aboard God’s love bus. I reached heaven’s gate and there chose to wait, for the gate was locked, so I stood there docked. A voice then affirmed that I’d have discerned, the gate’s my ego, which I must forgo. Once there’s no blockage and no desires rage, cleansed of every sin, I may then walk in. I cowered in fear, for my life was dear. What’s left, if I die? Is heaven, a lie? Conscience egged me on, ego shorn, reborn, the false dropped away; I saw then God’s play! I was living light, shining day and night. The gate was but thought, fears, ego begot. The manifest world, but intent unfurled, to know all are one, each being God’s son. Life’s a lucid dream, where thought forms do stream. To exit this game, simply take God’s name. The rot’s sunk in deep. How long will we sleep? There’s no gate, dear friend. Vaporise! Ascend! 23-June-2022 One In Five Poetry Contest Sponsor: Joseph May Syllables: HMS
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Date: 12/14/2022 4:43:00 PM
Amazing message and realizations! You're so talented! Great work.
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Date: 12/14/2022 5:47:00 PM
Thank you, Diane. In truth all we each write are but vibrations drawn in by resonation
Date: 7/12/2022 8:48:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. What a "Creative" write. Have a great/blessed day................
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Date: 7/12/2022 6:42:00 PM
Thank you, dear Paula
Date: 7/11/2022 8:32:00 PM
Taken the whole concept introspectively and spiritually. Congratulations!
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Date: 7/12/2022 6:42:00 PM
Thank you, Chis!
Date: 7/11/2022 4:50:00 PM
Congrats on your win Seeker, Very nicely penned
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Date: 7/11/2022 6:26:00 PM
So happy you enjoyed, Joseph, thanks for hosting and for the recognition, God bless
Date: 7/2/2022 7:08:00 PM
Dear Seeker, I absolutely love this poem. You have used the intricate form in such a clever, flowing manner, I am highly impressed! And your unique interpretation of the theme is superbly masterful, and soulful. Love and blessings ~ Mala
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Date: 7/2/2022 7:40:00 PM
Thank you, Mala. :)
Date: 6/23/2022 12:05:00 PM
Seeker, you have illuminated the way to wholeness, thus holiness, by melding the ego and the spirit, by slipping out of the bonds of the "false." Beautifully written - masterfully composed in this intricate dance of jueju! Blessings of wholeness to you! Best wishes for the contest.
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Date: 6/23/2022 7:21:00 PM
Thank you dear Sam! I’m so delighted to receive your kind words of support. :)
Date: 6/23/2022 4:57:00 AM
A poem stretching to infinity.... ! The transformation within will help any locked gate to unlock. When ego is butchered, the gate itself will vanish and free access will be assured. Ego, the blocking gate dissolves once we become light, illuminated by God's brilliant light. How uniquely and metaphorically, you have approached the subject....dear Seeker friend ! This goes into my FAVE.
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Date: 6/23/2022 8:02:00 AM
Thank you, Valsa. I’m overwhelmed by your response!
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