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The Oceans Deed

THE OCEAN’S DEED Rushing waters of natural pool cascade onto my head. Better half's off to grab camera — shot he’ll take when I’m dead. The ocean’s deed to push me under amuse the man I’ve wed. 7/25/2020 7/25/2020 Modern Sijo Total of 45 syllables

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Aditi Mishra

Date: 7/28/2020 12:50:00 PM

This one is so witty Kim. I've experienced this once so now I maintain my distance. Congratulations on your win!

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/28/2020 6:19:00 PM

LOL! I’ve had two encounters! Thank you!

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 7/28/2020 5:09:00 AM

I have to tell you this one caused me anxiety; I have nearly drowned and it is an unpleasant feeling.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/28/2020 6:19:00 PM

Yikes! Hugs.

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 7/26/2020 12:01:00 AM

I never go too deep into the sea, but I agree with you although great fun, never turn your back on it. Lovely poem Kim. Blessings, Jennifer.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/26/2020 3:52:00 AM

This really happened...lol. I watched a father and his daughter under the cascade of water. So I decided to go under and indeed I did as it pushed me under. My sunglasses which were on the top of my head, were pushed onto my face such that my nose was bruised. Crazy!

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 7/25/2020 4:48:00 PM

The ocean can play rough sometimes - sounds like a fun excursion, though!

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/25/2020 4:52:00 PM

Oh it was! As the saying goes - never turn your back on the ocean. Playful for sure.