The Last Organ Grinder

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Bedraggled the old man sat, monkey on his lap. However could he recover from this mishap? Louts took his organ and attacked him with a bat. Monkey on his lap, bedraggled the old man sat. His old heart gutted, his mind totally wrenched. Rain yesterday had left him quite drenched. We are OK my darlin, to his monkey he muttered. His mind totally wrenched, his old heart gutted. The rooftop a safe haven, for he and his pet. Not much chance of another organ, he will get. He was an expert on the organ, a regular Maven. For he and his pet, the rooftop was a safe haven. He can still sing, dance and tap the old soft shoe. He was the best organ grinder New York ever knew. Shoes are worn, organ gone, his monkey is everything. Dance and tap the old soft shoe, he can still sing.

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Silent One

Date: 11/22/2023 12:05:00 PM

Your quatrain rhymes and flows very well.. Congratulations on your placement in the contest..

Speaks Volumes
Date: 11/25/2023 1:41:00 PM

Thank you

Ink Empress

Date: 11/1/2023 12:01:00 AM

Such a heartfelt and moving take on this prompt! I love your rhymes as always queen! You are truly a natural! And your storytelling skills are on point here too! Beautifully and poetically delivered! Pleasure always reading your work

Speaks Volumes
Date: 11/1/2023 12:41:00 AM

Thank you Empress, I am glad you liked it. Its heart warming to know that poets such as yourself, Paula and Sotto, take time to acknowledge my poems. Its really appreciated.

Sotto Poet

Date: 10/31/2023 6:28:00 PM

Dear, SV, The poem exhibits the beauty of its words akin to the radiant stars. The meticulous selection of words amplifies the poem's impact, in a world tainted by injustice and suffering. The portrayal of the final organ grinder surely stands as a formidable contender in the contest. Through the power of visualization, he shields himself from the harsh realities until society is prepared to confront them. This remarkable display of unfiltered emotions of malevolence within our world.

Speaks Volumes
Date: 10/31/2023 6:51:00 PM

Dear friend the magic you weave with your reverence of words is amazing. You just turned a forlorn sickly old lady into a delighted poet. I am sure the poem isn't worthy of your generosity but it is overpoweringly welcomed. Thank you so much.