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The Girl with Seethrough Eyes
 
How My First Poem Was Born Poetry Contest 
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11.30.24

eyes that drive insane heaven scented my soul mate erotic hips swayed heaven's far away from me their sweet moment poem born

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Date: 12/3/2024 7:13:00 AM
Anaya, this particularly intrigues. It's striking in the amount of sensuality you convey in a compact poem. That takes talent! Heaven scented makes quite an impression on those observing! Smiles!
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Date: 12/2/2024 8:07:00 AM
Hi Anaya, I'm sure it was love that inspired you to write a sensual first poem, good luck in the contest. xx
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Date: 12/2/2024 9:24:00 AM
It was, and I am forever grateful for how it came about, it ignited my inspiration and served as a catalyst for my further writing endeavors. Ty, John! xo
Date: 12/2/2024 12:01:00 AM
This is a beautiful romantic and sensual piece dear Anya. You mentioned 'Masala' and Shankar in you poem and I'm tempted to say that my Dad who was a master musician taught the great L Subramaniam, who wrote the Musical Score for 'Mississippi Masala'. Though he hadn't met Ravi Shankar personally, but knew of him, he taught another Great Conductor Zubin Metha (the late Pavarotti's conductor and conductor of the California Symphony) who no doubt knew Shankar. Just a bit of Trivia. I trust your art work is going well. Hugs Maria
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Date: 12/2/2024 9:21:00 AM
Ty, Maria. I am delighted you mentioned your father's impressive musical credentials, you must be so proud. I love the sitar and Indian movies!! :) Zubin Metha! yes everybody knows him here in L.A. (Los Angeles Philharmonic) The Hollywood Bowl, nearby is the Greek Theatre both Open-Air its were I frequently go, last I saw were the Gypsy Kings. As you can see, I move in different circles, there is so much music choices to love. Maria, I found Mississippi Masala stars Denzil Washington, and I will watch it tonight. Thank you for the wonderful trivia and memories you've brought me. Xhugs ~Anaya oh, I love to experiment with graphic design, (book covers) simple things. ;)
Date: 12/1/2024 11:09:00 AM
Dear anaya, this gives and emanates sensuality to me in the most exquisite manner in the form of tanka in few syllables youv said so much. I love the way youv written this, especially how you’ve stated “ heaven scented my soul mate “ what a cosmically pleasing line “ their sweet moment poem born “ so beautiful how love can inspire and turn us into poets. Reminds me of lady gaga movie, forgot the name but remember the song “ always remember us this way” so heartfelt! Best wishes. Sending you light always
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Date: 12/1/2024 11:39:00 AM
Ah, yes "A Star Is Born" remade many times, dear poetess. Love does make us do things we've never done, in my case write a poem. I'm pleased that you found my little Tanka cosmic! Romance seems to be in the air :):) xo TY!
Date: 12/1/2024 10:32:00 AM
Covid surely up ended conventional habits and norms, as I read below on your comment to U.S. To quote Alice "Things are getting curiouser and curiouser" My best bestie, Robert
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Date: 12/1/2024 11:43:00 AM
Eager to know what what is, anything goes or is it all's fair in love and war! Ty for your reviews always my bestie. Winks and smiles
Date: 12/1/2024 9:53:00 AM
This is very intriguing. So mysterious to me. I was going to comment on your stanzas but now I can see that you used only the last one. That is the one in tanka style. Well done.
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Date: 12/1/2024 11:44:00 AM
Ty, Andrea! I'm delighted you found it intriguing and mysterious! xo
Date: 11/30/2024 7:19:00 PM
Interesting memory throwback of yesteryears
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Date: 11/30/2024 8:07:00 PM
Ty, US. I am delighted you found it interesting. A memory, a shrug of resignation. After covid had stricken the world. People acted in unusual ways, after the "stay in" and "away" period. It's been 3years on the soup! :):) I'm grateful for PS
Date: 11/30/2024 4:33:00 PM
so delicate inspiration, lovely and touching yann
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Date: 11/30/2024 4:40:00 PM
This is a true story, Yann. It was jealousy that drove me to write my first poem. Ty for your kind comments, always :)

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