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The Darkened Bar

The lonely congregate on filthy stools. Imbibing from common spigots, dispensing sour, fermented grain. The stench of vomit invading the hazy, impure air is not noticed. Unkept men slowly poison minds and lives. Dirty women, wearing cheap cosmetics, stare into the bottoms of unwashed mugs. Desperation and regret fill every pore. Ugliness pervades the oppressive atmosphere. It is here where the mistaken turns merge. Broken lives dissolve into liquid narcotics. No hope survives in the eyes of a drunkard. He steps towards his grave in a dulled stupor. She dances to hell with a bottle of corrosive.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011




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Date: 11/6/2012 1:02:00 AM
You've painted a powerful image in my brain. You really know how to get under the reader's skin and I am impressed by your work. Keep up the greatness! Always, Laura
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Date: 7/25/2011 1:15:00 PM
Great write! I really like your poems... stands out amongst the rest! Regarding your Q: my poem is about 3 diffrent segments of ways to relax in lost meaning. It will take a long time to really get to the core, so I like to leave most poems with a more visual discription. Its about creating your own meaning...for each...like a Rorshack...
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Date: 7/24/2011 6:04:00 PM
What a realistic depiction of the darkened bar, Michael
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Date: 7/24/2011 2:58:00 PM
WHAT A MARVELLOUS WRITE...FOR THE TIME BEIGN I FELT MYSELF ...IN THIS PLACE...UR IMAGINATION POWER IS SO STRONG !Dirty women, wearing cheap cosmetics, stare into the bottoms of unwashed mugs....U MUST SEND UR POEMS TO AN EDITOR LOVE
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