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Termite of Time

Where am I? Where has my vision taken? Away amidst the turbulent seas with safety of shore forsaken Neither the days of grandeur remain, nor the blissful drunken nights Dismal is my life, alas! All eaten by time’s termites When this sea of tears will dry up and land will be in sight Holding olive branch in beak I see no dove to alight My love is lost and youth parted leaving me aghast Here I am with sunshine gone and sky of life overcast The goblets of your eyes are no more inviting me to drink In the horrid moments of sorrow and apathy I sink A living corpse, that´s all my pitiable life is like With gaping mouth, the angel of death is ready to strike. Sintra, Portugal, June 14, 2016

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Date: 8/6/2022 11:30:00 AM
Hello Muhammad, in Ghazal same words are repeated in in second line of each couplet. It's a great write, but I don't think it's a Ghazal, change its form. Blessings
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Date: 6/22/2016 12:40:00 PM
Hi Mohammad, This is a very nice beautiful poem. The form should be "couplet" or even it could be "masnavi" but it is not ghazal! Poetry soup has a good example for this style of poetry....Pashang
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 7/17/2016 2:24:00 AM
Hi Mohammad, thanks for stopping and reading one my ghazals. The nearest site to your book on the web is aseer-e-khayal
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Mohammad Yamin
Date: 7/13/2016 12:54:00 PM
Thanks for visiting my poem and for your appreciation. In fact the poem is a translation of my Urdu Ghazal from my book Ashhab-e-khayal. That is why I classified it as Ghazal giving it a title unlike Ghazals. Had it not been a translation I would have classified it as couplet but not Masnavi. The poem is not even near a Masnavi. Regards
Date: 6/20/2016 8:37:00 PM
Very well expressed and written! :)
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Mohammad Yamin
Date: 7/13/2016 12:57:00 PM
Thanks Arthur vaso for your kind appreciation. You are very kind.
Date: 6/19/2016 2:54:00 PM
- Your first poem in 2016, Mohammad :) - A deep and touching poem - Thoughts about life .... and sad sunsets .... but, tomorrow is a new day ..... the sun will shine on you - Nice to see you :) - Best wishes and hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Mohammad Yamin
Date: 6/20/2016 1:56:00 PM
Thanks Sunshine Smile for your admiration and message of encouragement and hope. You are great. -Mohammad

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