Tatters

I drew this sad pencil drawing when I was feeling down It's the way I picture myself, the vision of a gloomy clown Messy hair, bulbous nose, my mouth sketched in a frown My tears on the verge of spilling. In them I wish I'd drown Baggy suit, ruffled neck, a disguise I'll wear until it tatters She doesn't care about me. It's only her life that matters This costume hides my broken heart, in pieces it scatters but my eyes reveal the sorrow I feel as my hope shatters This is the dismal face of the man after words of rejection I've been fooling myself to think she felt ardent affection I'm lost and feeling all alone, without a sense of direction A wretched clown is what I see, mirrored in my reflection January 6, 2023 Tatters Poetry Contest Sponsored by Mystic Rose Rose

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Len Gasun

Date: 1/13/2023 5:07:00 PM

A brilliant and creative write my dear friend Lin! Congratulations on your win and on this wonderful monorhyme poem. Thanks for sharing. Blessings. Hugs

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 1/12/2023 4:39:00 PM

Love how you used monorhyme and especially in the final verse! Congratulations!

Lin Lane
Date: 1/12/2023 5:57:00 PM

Thanks a lot, Kim.

Janice Canerdy

Date: 1/12/2023 9:39:00 AM

Lin, a big CONGRATS on your win. I like your approach to the prompt! Janice

Lin Lane
Date: 1/12/2023 5:57:00 PM

Thank you very much, Janice.

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 1/12/2023 6:48:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. A lovely yet sad write. Loved the mirrored ending. The costume will hide much from others. Have a wonderful day.......................

Lin Lane
Date: 1/12/2023 6:50:00 AM

Thanks for your nod in acknowledging this one, Paula.

Valsa George

Date: 1/7/2023 12:12:00 AM

This self portrait is so touching and true to every detail of the portrait shown. Though fictional it has a rare effect. Beautiful entry for the contest, Lin. All the Best.

Lin Lane
Date: 1/7/2023 5:45:00 AM

Thank you for such a great review, Valsa.

Terry Flood

Date: 1/6/2023 12:16:00 PM

Hey! I’ve got one of those mirrors….. I expect his mother loves him. Fine entry to the contest, Lin. All the best. Terry

Lin Lane
Date: 1/7/2023 5:44:00 AM

I trust you don't see yourself in such a mirror, Terry. I cannot fathom you being gloomy, but we all have moments of sadness over something. Smile and thank you.