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Submissive Silence Premiere Contest Winner

What difficult insanity? Repeating every day. Laughing, pure absurdity at life’s prevailing way. The lack of understanding buried deep in darker deeds. Dysfunctional autonomy, that never will succeed. Psychotic conversations with an entity not there. Do you feel the sunshine’s warmth? Or smell the human air? As myriads of madness comprise the daily being, vital judgements come to be a warped reality’s seeing. For some submissive silence is the only game to play. To speak reason to unreason is impossible to say. Please take away this sad refrain of misplaced, senseless mind and place it quick, somewhere with help for others of its kind. 5/27/2024

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Date: 5/29/2024 3:19:00 PM
Congratulations Dear
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Janis Medders Tobechi
Date: 5/29/2024 3:22:00 PM
Thank you, blessing. Janis
Date: 5/29/2024 1:26:00 PM
Congratulations! I'm not usually a fan of end rhyme but this won me over right away. I really liked the cadence of the shorter lines which gives the questions a manic urgency, increasing the experience of reading a poem about madness (of sorts). Then the slight turn at the end to send the mind away from you was a lovely twist of resignation. The rhythm is so well-crafted and the pacing keeps a steady drive all the way through. Really great work :)
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Janis Medders Tobechi
Date: 5/29/2024 3:27:00 PM
Jaymes, so much I appreciate this placement. It is extremely encouraging for me. This was written after some challenging few days with a relative. Blessings and I thank you for your innovative, open-minded judgement.
Date: 5/27/2024 6:00:00 AM
If only it were a dream: 'deep darker deeds', 'myriads of madness' - the alliteration here seems to make a spiral (downward). I like the pivot in the middle, seeking sunshine, and the unanswered plea that seems to create an empathy for the feelings in the poem. J :)
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Janis Medders Tobechi
Date: 5/29/2024 3:29:00 PM
Thank you for the insight and I appreciate your in detailed critique. Blessings, Janis

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