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Christuraj Alex

Date: 12/16/2023 6:46:00 PM

"children hope they still have pizza for lunch, having escaped the clutch of an impending death and survived an abbreviated recess" - A very dramatic depiction of a frightful event. Very intricate and suspense-filled. Congratulations!

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 12/16/2023 5:32:00 AM

A pleasure to read your winning poem.

Jaymee Thomas
Date: 12/17/2023 1:05:00 PM

Thanks, Richard. It's very kind of you to take the time to comment. I appreciate it - this was a fun one to get lost in the writing process with.

Valsa George

Date: 12/16/2023 5:12:00 AM

What a shocking experience for the children. Yet in the face of threat they huddled together and sought safety in the toilet reeking with the smell of urine. Their childhood mind still fluttered at the thought of pizza waiting for them for lunch.... once they are out of danger. So powerful . Congratulations Jaymee on your first place win.

Jaymee Thomas
Date: 12/17/2023 1:03:00 PM

Such kind words, Valsa. Thank you - this was a lot of fun to write as I remembered some of those school yard days.

Edward Ibeh

Date: 12/16/2023 3:39:00 AM

Such a beautifully composed write, Jaymee. This was a joy to read. Congratulations on your top win in my contest!

Jaymee Thomas
Date: 12/17/2023 1:02:00 PM

Thanks, Edward. I really enjoyed writing this - you gave so many interesting prompts to choose from too!