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Room Made of War

There is a room no walls, no floor woven black and made of war no sun to crawl no stars transcend elliptic arc never descend in this place mirror of death brought to life by shallow breath glass and ghost to crack and burn the crying night in twilight churn when I fall in places deep this room I dwell in frozen sleep and there it speaks in twisted tongue soothing dark from twilight sung: “breathe in me the golden eye god and rage deep alibi act of love unholy light bead of dark my second sight spy this world weapon point enemy I will anoint taste my wrath upon thy lips these words of war like water slips and rips the earth cold innocence descent to dust our recompence” I hold this dream beneath the sea and from my mouth withdraw a key into the latch I crack the sun and hide this room from everyone mirror black bolt and lock pitted rust nick and knock silent step watch and wait unholy mind incinerate

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Date: 10/18/2024 1:29:00 AM
Great poem and entry for this competition, congratulations
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Mat Ignacio
Date: 10/18/2024 7:58:00 AM
thank you, terry - appreciate the comment
Date: 10/16/2024 9:31:00 PM
Captivated by your rhythm in this piece. The brief lines, read quickly, building suspense and chaos quickly—sucking the reader into a dizzying mental spiral. Truly an immersive read and experience. Well done. Congratulations on your finish
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Mat Ignacio
Date: 10/17/2024 7:52:00 AM
thank you for the comment and congratulations yourself, edward - a pleasure to read yours as well.
Date: 10/16/2024 5:42:00 PM
Mat, I was super impressed with your poetry! The psychological terror aspect of trauma can be terrifying! You describe this feeling, this hidden trauma so creatively and with heart. Thank you for sharing your amazing gift with us for this contest! It is truly a powerful poem! Xoxo-Crystol
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Mat Ignacio
Date: 10/17/2024 7:53:00 AM
thank you, crystol - take care and have a great day
Date: 10/11/2024 8:07:00 AM
At first I was thinking it was a prayer room / spiritual warfare. Sounds like a battle of the mind, waging war against the evil that tries to creep in. Either way, this is powerful!
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Mat Ignacio
Date: 10/11/2024 11:56:00 AM
thank you for taking the time
Date: 10/11/2024 5:57:00 AM
Hello Mat, wonderfully powerful! I really sense the experience of war creates a psychological space within a person that is difficult to escape or fully process. Yes, this internal "room" becomes a part of the individual, influencing their perception of the world and themselves long after the physical conflict has ended. Almost like Trauma! Autumn Blessings, My Friend, Daniel
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Mat Ignacio
Date: 10/11/2024 7:48:00 AM
thank you for the thoughtful comment - have a pleasant day
Date: 10/10/2024 4:04:00 PM
What power...the darkness has in your words....but it is your light. Wow, Mat...
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Mat Ignacio
Date: 10/10/2024 8:30:00 PM
i am personally grateful to you for taking the time to respond - sending light to you

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